Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Compared with people who live in urban areas, the people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families.
Nowadays, urbanization has gathered people in the cities together, yet some individuals prefer to stay in the country. Living condition dramatically varies as we move from towns to villages. The controversial question which arises regarding this concept is whether or not cities and big towns offer a higher quality lifestyle to people in comparison to villages. I am of the opinion that people living in urban parts of the country have a more prosperous life. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
First of all, security of the people will be addressed completely in the cities. The abundance of people has required authorities to adopt different means, for the safety of citizens will be ensured. The formation of police organization, relocating wild animals far from the city are amongst methods applied by the states. Although some people may argue that robbery is more common in big cities, they should notice that in most cases, thieves will be caught by policemen. On the other hand, people in rural places usually suffer from a lack of safety. My friends’ experience is a compelling example of this. My high school friend, Ali, moved with his family to a small population village after his graduation. The village was near a forest area which bears existed. One night, a bear approached my friend’s home and attacked his father working in the yard. The family pushed back the bear, but it was too late, and he got a deep injury on his leg. Therefore, lack of security in the village caused this tragedy which we never hear occurs in a city.
Secondly, the big towns have more types of facilities available, so society’s primary needs will be met. Different kinds of schools, hospitals, entertainments, to name but a few, have developed in cities to increase citizens’ prosperity. In case of any urgent situation, the corresponding organizations exist to solve the issue. On the other hand, because of the lack of budget, small towns are not well-equipped, and they usually travel to big cities to answer their needs. Continuing my previous example; After the bear moved back, the family called for an ambulance to take him to the hospital. However, it took a long time for an ambulance to arrive since the nearest hospital was fifteen miles away. Consequently, Ali’s dad bled a lot and went unconscious. Unfortunately, his father passed away when they were in the ambulance since they should have driven the same distance to the hospital. Had they lived in the city, this tragedy would have never occurred.
In short, taking all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that cities provide better ways to keep our families safe. Providing protection from possible threats, coupled with offering more advanced services, are the reasons which stregthen my point of view.
- TPO 42 integrated 81
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 258, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... which arises regarding this concept is whether or not cities and big towns offer a higher qua...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, as to, in short, first of all, in most cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2375.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07478632479 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86310992779 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581196581197 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 748.8 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.3677684871 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.962962963 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.03703703704 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122400511218 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0318519225728 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0370496813942 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0783076297872 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415781279528 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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