Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, uncle, aunt) is less important than it was in past
There is a prevalent view that extended family is always prosperous for the growing children. Some people might feel that extended family was important in past while other may feel that it is now too important as before. In my personal opinion, I feel that the extended family is as important now as it was in past. I feel this way mainly for two reasons which I will examine in my essay.
First of all, The extended family helps to make children mature earlier. In the extended family the children grows with the people of different generation such as grandparent, uncle, parents, cousins etc, such grow up will be boon for the children as they can get the experience and advise from such range of people. Like being with grandparents can help them to become responsible, as grandparents will tell their story of being responsible in life at a very young age. Consequently, such stories might help children to be responsible at early age. For example, I used to live with my grandparents when I was at school. Everyday, I used to walk with my grandfather at evening, at which, he used to tell his childhood story. He used to tell me how losing father at young age made him to struggle . Such stories used to make me more motivated to become responsible. And I proudly can say that it eventually make me more responsible at young age. Had I did not live with my grandparents I would not have understood importance of being responsible at young age.
Secondly, I believe that it would make children well-mannered and respectful. When children live with the grandparents, than they would develop love for the old people and will learn to respect them. Evidently, Children living in nuclear family would not have the experience of old people and looks them with hatred. Further children of extended family knows the behavior of old people and do not get offended by the rude nature of old people, which is most likely to be obvious for children of nuclear family to get offended by such rude behavior. As a result, Livinig on extended family makes children more mannered. This can be exemplified by my own experience. Once there was the son of my boss who was grown up in a nuclear family. Once my boss and my family went to a trip. In the trip, our both children got to encountered with an old man in a street. the son of my boss got intimidated by the old man and his behavior and due to hatred to old people he started to hit old man with some pebbles. Nevertheless, my son who was grown with grandparents reacted in opposite way. Despite the old man being rude, He use his mental astuteness and experience with his grandparents and deal with him in respectful manner, which ultimately make the old man also to behave properly.
Finally, The extended family would improve the we-feeling among the family members. Living with members of different generations and sharing each others grims and sorrows would make the better bonds. The extended family would also improve the helping nature among the members.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that extended family are as important today as it was before in past. This is because living with extended family makes people not only resposible but more mannered and respectful. Further it will improve we feeling among family members.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, look, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 52.1666666667 169% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2718.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 575.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72695652174 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89685180668 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6633279881 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.408695652174 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 855.0 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.1922596937 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.9375 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.96875 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46875 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21660202545 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715909030848 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616474828673 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151372128186 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449310510741 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.01 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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