Any issue related to famous entertainers and athletes is bound to attract a large amount of attention. The argument about whether these famous people deserve to have more privacy than they have now has been ongoing for a long period of time. Some people support the view that famous people should enjoy more privacy as they should have privacy when they are off work. However, others don't agree with it and hold different opinions. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the statement that famous entertainers and athletes deserve more privacy and I will develop my ideas in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, famous people can recharge from their personal life and make better performance. Without moderate privacy, entertainers and athletes can not relax and rest. Imagine if we go on a vacation, there are cameras everywhere, are we able to have a good rest? Furthermore, entertainers and athletes usually spend a lot of time and effort practicing, they deserve the right to take some good rest and acquire energy from their private life. For example, one of the famous singers in my country, Amy, decided to go on a long vacation to recharge herself. She asked the reporters and fans to give her some privacy so that she can have her own time and focus on her new album preparation. One year later, she showed up again with amazing new songs. As a result, I maintain famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy.
Secondly, famous entertainers and athletes should have more privacy for safety reasons. There are some accidents in that famous entertainers and athletes got injured due to a lack of privacy. People always like gossip news. Therefore, some reporters and media like to stalk the private life of famous people and publish where the famous people go on vacation and disclose their personal schedules. It trigger some crazy fans chasing famous people and occurred some incidents. For instance, there was news that a famous Korean star spent a vacation on a small island. So a passionate fan visited the island and tried to get close to the Korean star. In the end, the Korean star got injured because of the inappropriate action of his fans. For this reason, I think famous people should have more privacy as fans are more passionate nowadays.
In light of the reasons above, I strongly believe famous entertainers and athletes should have more privacy than they have now.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88807785888 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54297136638 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479318734793 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9908621043 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.347826087 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8695652174 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26086956522 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381970371495 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121101375218 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119303135892 0.0737576698707 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.302865070226 0.150856017488 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125923163402 0.0645574589148 195% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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