Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Government should build more art museum or music performance than recreational facilities?
The appearance of recreational facilities not only enriches people’s lives, but also gives rise to the question argued recently that whether government should fund recreational facilities rather than art museums and music performance centers. Though recreation facilities have their place in one’s life, there is no substitute for art museums and music performance centers.
Admittedly, recreation facilities function as a platform for people to loosen up. As a matter of fact, there are a large number of entertainment projects introduced or invested, such as night clubs, bars, amusement parks and stuff. Besides, an increasing number of cities are planning to research their own amusement parks which are a lot cheaper and more enjoyable than Disney. Thus, comparing art museums and music performance centers, merchants are more willing to invest recreational facilities, as these are more likely to appeal to modern people, for which they can make more profits. In this situation, what administrators need to do is to finance artistic and musical institutes, as these all play a significant role in our society.
For starters, artistic and musical institutes are beneficial to children’s intellectual advancement. Living in such a world flooded with competition, intellectual development is becoming increasingly crucial in the young age of a child, as it makes an individual have a competence of learning quickly and thinking deeply, outperforming others easily. Fortunately, the institutes of art and music, which need students’ powerful creativity and imagination, will exercise certain areas of children’ brain, involving in reasoning and learning. The experience of my cousin, a 9-year-old in grade 3, can be a compelling case for this point. At the beginning, he had little interest in her math study and used to give poor performance, whereas after visiting a music performance center, he changed a lot. In this center, he learned how to listen and enjoy the music; moreover, he was given a great quantity of chances to imagine the scene of music and create his own song, which stimulate certain abilities of kids. In half a month, my cousin became increasingly passionate with his math, especially some questions involved in creativity and reasoning, which is undoubtedly attribute to his experience of the music center.
In addition, art museums and music performance centers help children find out what they are really interested in. At such a young age, chances are high that chirdren may have no clue what they are passionate about and what they want to do in the future. Chances are also high that they may not be into compulsory courses like science, math, history and language, because they are usually difficult. In this situation, all children need to do is to go to art museums and music performance centers to experience what they are like. After entering such new and different realms, they may discover how enthusiastic they become about either of them or even both of them, developing a personal strong suit. Sometimes it is the case that the earlier they find their interests, the sooner the can get on the right track suiting them well. Therefore, it is common to see that young children hold solo exhibitions or concerts to show how much they like what they do.
In conclusion, regardless of the relatively small merits of funding recreational facilities, government should instead finance art museums and music performance center which are lack of funding, as they can develop children’ intelligence, help children find their interests.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 114, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...osen up. As a matter of fact, there are a large number of entertainment projects introduced or in...
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Line 5, column 1183, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'attributed'.
Suggestion: attributed
...ity and reasoning, which is undoubtedly attribute to his experience of the music center. ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... his experience of the music center. In addition, art museums and music perform...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e, help children find their interests.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, may, moreover, really, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 32.0 8.0752688172 396% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3041.0 1977.66487455 154% => OK
No of words: 570.0 407.700716846 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3350877193 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88617158649 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05634025571 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 298.0 212.727598566 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522807017544 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 939.6 618.680645161 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.7752014733 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.227272727 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9090909091 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31818181818 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253575043063 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.078956544478 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0838249242596 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172875020724 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.091069192666 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 86.8835125448 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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