Students pursue better study courses to go to good colleges for their future. Many people have conflict about which study course is the most effective course for students. Some people think that high schools should support students to discover the way they want to study but others oppose to this idea. I agree that high schools should allow students to study the courses that students want to study. I have two reasons with regard to my opinion.
To begin with, students can realize what they really want to do in their future. They are able to get many opportunities to think and research about the major that they want to do and the occupation that they want to be. By researching and doing themselves, they can grow and expand their thinking about the thing that they want to do or do well. I have a compelling example for this. My friend told me before that she has a worry. She said that she is worrying about her future. She does not have enough time to agonize about what she really wants to do because she is concentrating her life on the things that were ordered by her school and academy. She has time to do only the homework instead of thinking about her future. She always feels that this is not a really good education for students. Especially our country, Korea.
Next, it works better that students do the things that they want to do than following the school's curriculum. As you know, most people have a great effect when they do what they want. Studying is the same with this. Students can move up their studying skill to the maximum level when they study what they want. For instance, when I study the subject that I am willing to do, it made a good deal of the actual test. Also it was built up with knowledge. I was motivated from this experience, and I still like the subject.
As a consequence, I agree with this statement. Because students can realize what they really want to do in the future. They become have a lot of time to think about it. Moreover, it works better that students do something that they want to do than following the school’s curriculum. Studying by choosing themselves encourages students to have interested in the study.
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...dents to have interested in the study.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, really, so, still, well, for instance, you know, to begin with, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1792.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5831202046 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3682974927 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.429667519182 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 534.6 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.6085638811 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.3703703704 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4814814815 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.81481481481 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354394030796 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115343942105 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114153182661 0.0737576698707 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272604926831 0.150856017488 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127424464161 0.0645574589148 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 11.7677419355 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.69 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.63 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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