Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Selecting job is one of crucial choices that each human deal with during life. Kind of career that people have determines their social level in society and could provide them with either convenience or sever life. Some people believe that it is better for people to choose the first secure job opportunity rather than waiting for their ideal job, whereas some others hold an opposite attitude. In my view, accepting the first chance for having secure job is logical than waiting for better opportunities for two remarkable reasons.
The main reason is that by dealing in a career as soon as possible will provide people with valuable experiences. When people involve in a job, whether they like or not, they confronting with completely different world than education, Therefore, by contacting with various colleagues and trying to overcome the obstacles of this job, they could gain enough experiences for other works that would be more satisfying. For example, when I graduated university, I accept the first job which secure me in my needs, although it was not my favorite career. At first it was really hard for me to both dealing with the job that I wasn't interested in and facing a new kind of relation that exists there. Fortunately, after a while I could obtain valuable knowledge and improve my resume which help me in finding a more satisfying career. My first job not only secure me, but it was my first step to learn great amount of information for better job. Taking a secure job provide you with more benefits rather than waiting for ideal job.
Second, people feel more relief by choosing a secure job instead of waiting for better one. Life has a lot of cost that people always have the anxiety of affording it. If people can feel secure about their cost, they could continue to find their success. For instance, statistics show that having a secure job has more effect in peace of mind. Researchers investigation among two groups indicates that people who spend a lot of time without job to find their favorite career have high level of stress and tension due to they could not afford their life cost. However, the group who take a secure job immediately have more relief of mind which increase their mind efficiency that enable them to improve their talent and become prospers. If people had had a secure job, they would be more successful.
In conclusion, I do believe that selecting the first secure job is much better that waiting to find a job that would be more satisfying. Not only does a secure job increase people's experience, but it also provides them with less tension. I think each person should pay more attention in choosing job.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 622, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
... me to both dealing with the job that I wasnt interested in and facing a new kind of ...
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Line 9, column 747, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: had
...r talent and become prospers. If people had had a secure job, they would be more succes...
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Line 13, column 297, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to job'
Suggestion: to job
...n should pay more attention in choosing job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, therefore, whereas, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, kind of, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2218.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82173913043 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46979006172 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476086956522 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4175655904 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.619047619 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9047619048 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.04761904762 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400101253665 0.236089414692 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148924208932 0.076458572812 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0915414393777 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280347289963 0.150856017488 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0225373425808 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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