It goes without saying that in this complicated and up-to-the-date era in which we live in, all human beings are always striving to increase their salary to release their mind from the issues regarding financial problems. Whereas some individuals debate that increasing the revenue of professors worked in universities do not improve the quality of education, on the other side of the continuum, stand others, believing that this phenomenon actually plays a key role in a professor life. As far as I am concerned, I categorically concur with this mental attitude that the quality of education will increase if the professors earn more money. In the ensuing essay, my perspective will be substantiated by underlying reasons.
To begin with, due to the fact that the rate of financial problems has increased during the past few years, therefore, all human beings' mind are involved in these problems. Thus, if universities pay more money to their professors and increase their revenues, the professor’s minds will not preoccupy with those problems. Under this circumstance, the concentration of professors will enhance which dramatically influences the education quality to improve. An example can shed some light on the following subject. My father was a distinguished professor at the University of Melbourne. Several years ago, due to his low income, we had lots of difficulties in our life. One day, he talked to the head of the engineering department and the chancellor confirmed that he would increase my father's salary. This event really persuaded my father to release his mind from the economic problems and focus more on his tasks at the university. Furthermore, he spent more time to teach and manage his students and also wrote different proposals for the industry to get tremendous projects.
Moreover, by increasing the salary of professors, universities encourage them more to participate in several industrial projects and attract more talented students to the university. Under such a situation, the quality of education due to the attraction of more talented students will improve, revenues of universities will surprisingly increase, and universities are able to obtain a great reputation among other universities. An example can drive this notion home. In the aforementioned example, my father could eventually get a huge project from Tesla Company which led to increasing the popularity of that university. Subsequently, he became familiar with a large number of talented individuals in that environment. This actually helped him to motivate more students to continue their education in my father's university which brought a huge budget to the university.
To wrap it up, taking into account the aforementioned reasons and examples, I am of opinion that increasing the professors' salaries will obviously boost the quality of education. This is because they do not have any economic problem anymore to think about it and lose their concentrations, and also this will bring great fame for the university.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 661, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, furthermore, if, moreover, really, regarding, so, therefore, thus, whereas, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2559.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36477987421 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13909921679 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517819706499 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 823.5 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5217596607 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.857142857 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144194905118 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459560555685 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413373004487 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0964256360289 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179109759735 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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