Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better to live in one town or city all your life than to move from one place to another.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in this progressive and sophisticated world, where we live, everyone tries to make a better and enjoyable life for itself. There has been a controversial debate among people living in the contemporary world as to whether having sedentary life, staying in one place, is really more beneficial that moving from one place to another. From my perspective, changing the place in which we live is a great notion, and two reasons to support my viewpoint are presented as follows.
To begin with, doing this, moving from one place to another, people are able to experience different novel things, which makes them more satisfied with the living. It is not a secret to anyone that we are social creatures and we enjoy to acquire experiences that are helpful. We will meet new people and be familiar with new cultures and traditions. I am of the opinion that since we live once in this green and beautiful planet, we should take the advantages of it and be happy. Changing the place in which we live is a good experience to makes us happy and satisfied because we gain more information. To put it in more vivid picture, when I was a child, my parents decided to live in Iraq, my fathers' country, and I spend two years of my life there, which was a valuable experience because I learnt how to speak Arabic fluently and I leant a lot about the culture of the people living in Iraq; In this way, I was an experienced girl who obtained numerous knowledge and that made me more content and happy with my personal life and with myself. Had I not lived in a new place, I could not broaden my horizon and I would not be so happy. As you can see, being aware of different new things helps us to quench our thirst of experiencing new habits and environments.
Furthermore, it helps people to find the best way for their personal lives. It is crystal clear that we all hesitate to choose a way for the living since we do not have any background and knowledge about it, but if we start knowing our planet better we are able to find out what kinds of lives is more effective; moving from one place to the other place is an alternative that makes it easier for us to figure the fate out and escape from the clutches of ignorance. An illustration of this, living in another country, Iraq, I found my way since I have more knowledge; although spending a restricted time of my life there was so productive, I understood that I belongs somewhere that respect women more and I could have freedom, thus I decided to migrate to European countries.
In sum, not only will people be able to enjoy the living and feel satisfactory, they will also be able to find the best way for their personal lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 236, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...people living in the contemporary world as to whether having sedentary life, staying in one p...
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Line 2, column 229, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'enjoy acquiring'.
Suggestion: enjoy acquiring
...one that we are social creatures and we enjoy to acquire experiences that are helpful. We will m...
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Line 3, column 660, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'belong'
Suggestion: belong
... was so productive, I understood that I belongs somewhere that respect women more and I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, really, so, thus, as to, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2215.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 492.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50203252033 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58067257575 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471544715447 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 108.820872181 48.9658058833 222% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 147.666666667 100.406767564 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.8 20.6045352989 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177064739365 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.066670579354 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627737074972 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119167228708 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721838799822 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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