Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Currently, there is a widespread believe that people do not need to worry about events happening around the world if they would not influence their daily lives. From my perspective, however, it is still necessary to know what is happening in the world.
In the first place, although many events seem unrelated to our daily lives, it still might influence us in certain aspect because we are not isolated. If we can see the trend of development through these events and do something about it, we may benefit from it. For example, my dad has been buying stocks for a few years but did not earn any money. Last year he started to read the news everyday. On the television, he found out a new kind source of energy will be widely used in the future. So, he looked for the companies that are into this field and bought their stocks, and he earned some money this time. It is clear that information of what's happening around the world can help us live a better life if we can make a good use of it.
Furthermore, getting know the event of the outside world can broaden our horizons. We can have a better understanding of the world and have fun during this process. Take my friend Lily as an example. She didn’t read a lot of news when she was young because her family could not afford a computer. But after she went to the university, she read news on the school’s computer everyday. Only after half a semester, we can tell she has changed a lot. She became more outgoing and always shared some deep opinion during the discussion. When we wonder how she did that, she said that getting knowledge of outside world has helped her a lot. It made her change the way of thinking and become more rational, and she also felt very satisfied when she knew more about the world.
In conclusion, getting know the information from the outside world is important, because the information can be useful since we are all connected, and getting know the information can give us pleasure and help us think deeper.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 34, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
Currently, there is a widespread believe that people do not need to worry about ...
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Line 2, column 388, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
.... Last year he started to read the news everyday. On the television, he found out a new ...
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Line 2, column 643, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...s time. It is clear that information of whats happening around the world can help us ...
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Line 3, column 374, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... she read news on the school’s computer everyday. Only after half a semester, we can tel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, still, for example, in conclusion, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1638.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52486187845 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43052482656 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541436464088 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3087189694 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2105263158 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0526315789 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131925361453 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431305159694 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532977328013 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103777302246 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687781840646 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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