Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? it is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that will affect your daily life.

In this hectic era, people mostly face with several unanticipated events in their daily life, whether domestic or internationally. Although some of these events have consequences which are not directly related to human beings' life, some others influence people's daily life in many aspects. When it comes to this point, many people believe that being aware of various events around the world is not essential for anyone, owing to the fact that they should pay attention only to those events which can affect their daily lives. I strongly repudiate these points of view and concur with the statement that knowing world-wide events is really important. In what follows, I will delve into couple of reasons to shed light on my response.

First, it leads people to have more better social communications. In general, people try to create bonds and make relationships by starting conversations with each other. One of the best vehicles to obtain the purpose is talking about mutual events. People who do not know each other could not find any mutual issues, except world-wide events. The more the known events from all over the world, the more the established relationships between people. As I remember, having entered to my new university, named Shahid Beheshti University, I faced with several students' groups which I wished to join them, but I had not got any mutual topics to start a communication with them. Being thankful to BBC broadcast, I started a helpful conversation with one of them about current economic situation of Iran, which leads to joining them as a clever friend. Never did I find any way for being friends with them, if I were not aware of world-wide events.

Second, should people know about events occurring around the world, they can find out opportunities and threats of their future life. Undoubtedly, by paying attention to world news, people can understand the happening events, which increases abilities to predict the future regarding past events. By this, informed people can better distinguish between what factors count as possibilities for having better life, and what elements count as threats. Based on a research done by management department of Shahid Beheshti University in order to find the effects of news to people, an experiment investigated how many regular people and students use news as a reliable source of information. At the end of this experiment, all people have been given a survey to write about advantages and disadvantages of news. It was reported that among above fifty percent of all involved people who have used news as a reliable source, roughly fifty percent have written about increasing predicting skills of them. This shows that knowing occurrences around the world is really essential to people, in order to find future opportunities and threats better.

To recapitulate, we can conclude that being aware of happenings around the world is an essential part of each people’s life. It is because by this strategy, people not only have better social communications but also, can find out future opportunities and threats easier. I strongly propose that people who want to improve these two aspects of his/her life, should work on knowing more about world-wide occurrences.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 220, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
...which are not directly related to human beings life, some others influence peoples dai...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 32, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...nse. First, it leads people to have more better social communications. In general, peop...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, regarding, second, so, in general, talking about

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 86.0 52.1666666667 165% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2721.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 528.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15340909091 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79356345386 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78064812386 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503787878788 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 837.9 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7636134056 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.304347826 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9565217391 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.39130434783 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20904858171 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0684139475335 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524814002864 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141063371032 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509643445627 0.0645574589148 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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