Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern world, people get loads of information from many sources all over the planet. Some people pay attention to every news in the world and pursue them, and some do not. As far as I am concerned, I totally believe that people should not care about events happening on the planet if that information does not affect them. The reasons why I think so will be elaborated upon hereunder.
First of all, knowing about all of the events that happen across the globe can cause stress in our lives. I mean, almost every day, bad things are happening around the world, and there is nothing we can do about them. Some countries are involved in wars with other countries, and some infected with civil wars. Also, there is vast poverty and hunger in many countries, especially African countries. Pursuing these kinds of news and events will disrupt and adversely affect our happiness. For instance, every day, there is horrible news about Syria and Yemen. There is a civil war in those countries, and unfortunately, many people die every day. If people pursue those events, they feel terrible, and their tranquility will be gone.
Second, by pursuing the events that are not important for us and do not affect our lives, we will get distracted from ourselves. To explain more, if people spend too much time watching foreign news and discuss them and think about them, they may lose some important events that happen in their vicinity and directly affects their lives. My own example illustrates this reality. A few years ago, when I was in the last year of high school, I was studying for the University Entrance Exam. In those days, the United States had just attacked Iraq, and everyone was listening to the news, although it did not affect their lives. I pursued every news and every event daily and almost forgot about my essential exam. They established a deadline for enrolling in the exam, but I was so busy with the news of the war. I missed that critical news, and accordingly, I missed the deadline. I could not take part in the exam that year, which was very bad.
In conclusion, with all this taken into account, I strongly believe that people should not pay attention to news and events that do not concern them. Because they will get sad and stressed, and they will be distracted by the news that directly affects them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 29, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...hereunder. First of all, knowing about all of the events that happen across the globe can...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, may, second, so, for instance, i mean, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1926.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69756097561 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35960956248 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50243902439 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.0619759142 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.7391304348 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8260869565 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78260869565 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 3.85842293907 415% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192753064754 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057853090102 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434330648057 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128587469592 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0118618647207 0.0645574589148 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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