I definitely agree with the idea that we should grasp what is going on around the world, no matter how unlikely it affects our daily lives. I have three reasons to support my viewpoint, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First of all, we are not living in a confined community. I am a university student and tackling a specific research in the field of neuroscience. However, it goes without saying that I should interact with other people than researchers and sustain my relationships. Keeping in touch with various people involves communicating with them and talking about the events happening not only around us but also around the globe. In order to keep up with the conversation, it might be beneficial to know what is happening around the world every day.
Another reasons is that we can brace ourselves for a future crisis. Take the case of global warming. It seemingly does not have any connection to our daily lives, but actually, it has a significant effect. In fact, I have heard that if temperature rises by one degree, the sea level rises by three centimeters, which means our land is diminishing year by year. Warm temperature means that we cannot live without an air conditioner. In my country, it is unbelievably hot because of the scorching sun, which makes air conditioners inevitable every day. Therefore, understanding things happening around the world is crucial.
Finally and most importantly, what is going on in other places may have a significant contribution to our daily lives. For example, most of the vegetables are imported in my country. Then, what if the shipping container wrecked? What if a famine or a war occurs in the producing country? The answer to all these questions is evident. The prices surge, or worse, we cannot have sufficient intake of nutrients, leading us to diseases such as scurvy. In fact, there are a myriad of chances where we might affected by events in a far remote area. Whereas the development in transportation system has enabled us to connect the distant places, it has possibly induced butterfly effects. That means a single event could cause a huge impact on the worldwide economy.
For those three reasons, I am convinced that we should know about things that is happening worldwide. Understanding them will undoubtedly enrich our lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'specific research'.
Suggestion: specific research
... I am a university student and tackling a specific research in the field of neuroscience. However, ...
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Line 5, column 17, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[4]
Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
...the world every day. Another reasons is that we can brace ourselves for a futur...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...ppening around the world is crucial. Finally and most importantly, what is going on ...
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Line 7, column 470, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'myriads'?
Suggestion: myriads
...es such as scurvy. In fact, there are a myriad of chances where we might affected by e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, whereas, for example, in fact, such as, talking about, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1940.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97435897436 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89573810026 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558974358974 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.6826527244 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.6 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192055288459 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0455119562845 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529580853122 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11606020314 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660365932789 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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