Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's sophisticated world of rapid changes, and the age of communications, it has become easy to become informed of the current ongoing events all over the world. There are numorous options, by which an individual can stay tuned of what is going on around them. Additionally, sometimes these events are not related to the person reading them, or does not affect one’s life. Since this phenomenon is noticable, some think it is not crucial to follow these unrelated news, however, some other do not think so. Personally speaking, I agree with the idea of former group, and my reasons to substantiate this claim are provided upon hereunder.
Firstly, reading about the news and events occuring around the globe, which whether to know them or not will not affect our life is a waste of time. Time is precious, especially in nowadays competitive world we live in, and by allocating this time to things that does not bring a convincing outcome to your life, you are probably wasting your time. In other words, you can make better uses of this time, reading an article about your own job to improve your knowledge, or spend some time doing the delayed housework. As an example, suppose you are occupied in a famous company, and you have a family to support. Checking the most recent events, which does not have anything to do with you at all, every day morning, you will loose some of your time eating a well cooked breakfast. Also, if you follow these unrelated news again on the way back home, on the bus or the subway, not only they will not add some necessary information to you, but also waste the time you could spend on reading a psychological article, which could have improved your overall mental health.
Furthermore, many of these events are not positive and adds some stress to your mind. As we are living in a society of fast changes and competitiveness, this fact brings some stress and depression alongside, and reading and following some news, which not only could be unrelated, but also have a negative effect on you due to the unhappy occurence it contained. The more you read these news, the more you will suffer from anxioty, and as a result, this causes a long-term depression and even decreases your efficiency in life and job. An example will drive this fact home. A recent study in the psychology department of the university of Yale illustrates this phenomenon. Scientists divided the people of a the test into to seperate groups. They told the first group that, they have to read 10 minutes per day about the ongoing events around the world. Instead, the second group were told to spend this time on different activities such as sports. At the end of a 2 year observation, a test was given to both groups, which illustrated that the former group suffered from a low level of deppression. Also, they were less efficient at work comparing to the time they started the test. In contrast, the second cluster of people reported more happiness in life, and they felt an overall increase in how efficient they did their duties.
In conclusion, as the aforementioned details and reasons show, it is not important to read about the events happening around the world, rather it can be harmful in case of irrelevant and negative information. As the studies and the examples showed, this time could be put in better use.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 179, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...e of time. Time is precious, especially in nowadays competitive world we live in, and by al...
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Line 3, column 726, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[4]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...you at all, every day morning, you will loose some of your time eating a well cooked ...
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Line 5, column 381, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this news' or 'these newses'?
Suggestion: this news; these newses
...curence it contained. The more you read these news, the more you will suffer from anxioty,...
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Line 5, column 706, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: a; the
...menon. Scientists divided the people of a the test into to seperate groups. They told...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, so, well, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2765.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 581.0 407.700716846 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75903614458 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90957651803 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6025211935 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497418244406 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 871.2 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0310105048 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.208333333 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2083333333 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297522639866 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806938892766 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548571277375 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179005897438 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479370573319 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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