Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use a specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Over the last few years, the number of individuals who focus on whether workers should choose to work three days a week for long hours a day or five days for shorter times have increased significantly. A host of them embrace the view that they should work five days. I personally agree with it as working fives days brings real benefits. There are two reasons for my assertion illustrated as follows.
My main view, a view that is also favored by entrepreneur, is that the efficiency will be improved if employers’ concentrate themselves in working for five days a week. To be more specific, it is reported that ones cannot focus on one thing for more than a few hours everyday. If they stretch their attention span, their physical will be deteriorate, leading to the decline in efficiency and productive, be it at work or study. For example, a skilled pianist might have difficulties in practicing piano without drifting his attention to other less important things. Similarly, if workers just work three days a week, it has no doubt that they ought to work more than ten hours a day, which will make them become exhausted and absent-minded.
In addition, another factor that is associated to schedule should also be taken into consideration. If personnel work three days every week, they cannot arrange their lives appropriately as they have to devote themselves wholeheartedly in working from Monday to Wednesday without any free time to release pressure that built from heavy workloads. The next four days they might do not have any enthusiasm to travel and even go to cinema to hang out with their colleagues since they are too tired to go outside. However, if employers’ work five days a week, they spend six hours in finishing assignments. Then they can go shopping or exercise after coming off work. On weekends they could choose to travel nearby to broaden their horizons, which is a proper way to enjoy themselves.
To sum up, I disagree with the statement that workers work for three days a week because it has negative effects on efficiency and their arrangements.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 268, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... on one thing for more than a few hours everyday. If they stretch their attention span, ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, similarly, so, then, thus, for example, in addition, no doubt, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8985915493 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79656887289 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552112676056 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6472636991 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.6875 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1875 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6875 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350498890126 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123261139385 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888325079115 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246955470012 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0635850874599 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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