Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Recently, there has been a ton of debate about whether the government should spend money to improve internet service than to improve public transportation. If I were asked, I would definitely suggest that government should utilize their money to make the public transportation better instead of spending money on improving internet access. I firmly believe this way owing to several reasons, and I will elaborate on this in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, a better transportation will be significantly beneficial for the society. Improved public transports will encourage more people to avail public transports like bus, train etc. Moreover, they will be able to commute to their destination in comparatively less time. This would help them to save time to indulge themselves in more productive activities like gardening, spending quality time with families etc. Needless to say, the students will be most benefited out of it as they have to waste valuable time on traffic and specifically, during the exam days. In addition, having better transportation will help people specifically during emergency situation like health issues. My opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced by my own experience. You see, in 2010, on a friday night, my uncle had a heath attack and immediately we called the ambulance without any delay to get him to the hospital which was one hour away from our locality. But, unfortunately, the road condition was extremely horrible and there were more traffic jam over the road. As a result, the ambulance service was delayed and they reached our home almost after 2 hours of the call and that was the most devastating days for our family as we lost our uncle by that time. For this reason, if the transportation was better, we would have got some time to save his life by providing him a proper treatment.
Secondly, improving transportation will allow government to boost its revenue due to increased retail activities in that locality. Building more bridges, roads would allow that city to have better connectivity with nearby cities. Therefore, business men would prefer to use these facilities to tranport goods. In addition, it would also encourage them to set up a new shopping malls, hotels near the express ways. As a result, they would pay the taxes which would add up extra income for the government. Drawing from my own experience, five years back, the kalyani express way connecting Barackpore to airport was constructed near my locality. As a result, many people including me started using this road leaving out the old congested one as it would hardly take 30 mins to reach airport from my home. Eventually, many shopping malls and dhabas were constructed by the side of the express way, which allowed people to spend some time there and relax with some food during some hectic journey. It is certainly clear that investing money to transportation will benefit the government in many ways.
To sum up, in the light of the above mentioned points, I think its is more vital that government invest their money more to improve the public transportation rather than spending those on making internet access better. This is because both the public and the government will be benefited out of it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rnment will be benefited out of it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, i think, in addition, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 8.0752688172 310% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2720.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 537.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06517690875 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82458208598 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512104283054 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 848.7 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1396451127 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.8 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.48 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240355505068 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715239045128 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.085447128322 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188874437422 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0814584395614 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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