Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? it is more important for governments to spend money into internet access than to improve public transprtation
It goes without saying that the decisions the government of one country makes can effect their citizens lives in substansial ways. Because the more budget that goes to one cause, comes the flowrishment and improvement of that cause. So the decision that whether transportation should be put first or internet access, is crutially important. While many belive that transpotation and its improvement should be prioritiezed in comparision to internet access, others stand at the other side of the continuum, holding the view that nowadays, the internet is the most importatn aspect of life. Personally speaking, I strongly agree with this statement and the reasons to substanciate my view are elaborate upon hereunder.
To begin with, it is generally acknowledged that with the widespeared use of internet and its genesis people are dependent of it more than any other time in the history of human beings. So if givernment could improve it people would be much happier as everyone use it all the time. The public transportation is neather used this much, nor is it as widely used. So with the better internet, more people are satisfied. my own example is a commpelling illustration of this. non of my family members use public trasportation as we all have cars, but all of us use the internet at least eight hours a day.
Secondly, as internet is a relatively new technolory, even small amounts of money from the government can alter it greatly. Same can not be said about the transportation system. Taxes money have been used on this system for decades now, and some more money can not make much difference. To drive this point to home, i will make an exmaple of my own country. Billions of dollars have been spent on trasportation, but only half a million have been putted aside for the increase in the quality and accessibility of the internet, and last year when my county spend only a million on it, we witnessed unrealistic improvements.
In conclusion, having the afformentioned reasons and explanations into account, I believe that the government money should be spent on the internet accessibility and its other aspects. Not only the internet is wider in use both by the number of persons, and how much they use it, but It also takes less money to be able to improved in comparison to trains and busses and other transportation vehecles.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, at least, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1970.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96221662469 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95676901026 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534005037783 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.9531473831 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.444444444 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0555555556 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94444444444 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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