By and large, family members have played an indispensable role in the success of many people throughout the history. However, to what extent this contribution have been helpful during different era is a place of argument. There is a plethora of people who are in the conviction that nowadays it's much easier for one to achieve success without the support of his family members comparing to past, while others take a radically different point of view and disagree. To the extent that my personal perspective is concerned I accord with the first group. Among countless reasons which give adherence to my opinion I will delve into the most conspicuous ones in what follows.
Firstly, the advancement of technology has paved the way for people to achieve their goals without the necessity of their family members support in various ways. Internet, as one way, has enabled people to easily find financial support for their noble ideas and inventions through Internet campaign. For instance, several years ago my older brother had an idea about an electrical toothbrush, but since he was struggling with a lot of financial problems he wasn't able to finance his own idea. I myself didn't have any money at the time but suggested him to use an internet campaign to find eligible investors for his idea. Never did it cross my mind that his idea could attract so much attention as it did. Five months later and he started his own company and even sold his marketable product overseas. Neither I nor my parent had enough money to support him financially, however the marvelous of technology came handy and brought my brother fortune and success with it. .
Secondly, the inclination of people to egalitarian trends in the government has diminished the dependence of people on their family members to succeed. Through the social programs that governments nowadays perform, people are able to enjoy success independent from their family members support. The free education programs of Iran's government for example, has soared the rate of literate people up to 90 percent of the population which comparing to past shows a substantial increase. This free educational programs have eliminated the dependence of children on their parents to receive well-rounded education. My grandfather for example was able to practice medicine, for his uncle was helping him out and paying his university fees. I on the other hand, didn't ask for a penny from anyone to pay for my college tuition. The aristocratic structures of society in the past have been eliminated and provided people with less dependence on their family members.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons and examples leads to the conclusion that it's much easier for people to achieve success comparing to past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: wasn't
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Suggestion: .
...my brother fortune and success with it. . Secondly, the inclination of people t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, even so, for example, for instance, in short, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2306.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07929515419 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74650891029 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535242290749 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 724.5 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0451981683 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.3 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291732055223 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0938783964389 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0806728286273 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202412258233 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385415186229 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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