By and large, the career choice, is one the most important elements in people's lives. This will not only effect the life condition of a person but also can easily effect the lifestyle of his children and her family. There are a plethora of people who are in the conviction that one needs to try out various kinds of jobs before settling for one, while others take an opposite point of view. To the extent that my personal perspective is concerned, I accord with the first group. Among countless reasons which give adherence to my opinion, I will delve into the most important ones in what follows.
Firstly, through experiencing different jobs, you can find your weaknesses and strengths. You can practically examine your talents and find what you're passionate about. For instance, I always believed to be a good salesman, but choosing a job in industrial tool trade showed me that, I'm not a people person for sure and don't have what it takes to be a good salesman. The customers practically were overtaking the control of my life. And I was miserably unable to satisfy them and simultaneously keep my distance from them. They would invite me to parties, which I hated and would try to make a more personal relationship with me. Four months later, I decided to start teaching Turkish, which was my native language, for Farsi speakers. The teaching turned out to be very monotonous for me .After trying out many jobs, I went into mountain climbing, which was an absolute fit for me. I was able to keep my distance from people, mentally and practically, and get the excitement I wished for.
Second of all, trying different jobs can result a stronger social capital. You meet a lot of people in different occupations and they may come handy in matters that is not expected. For example my brother Saleh started his Coffee-shop when he was 35, and had tried out many jobs. He had a head start comparing to other Coffee houses, since a lot of people came to his store only because they had intimate relations with him. There raw coffee was bought much cheaper, since my brother was friend with the store owner and the list continued.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons come to the conclusion that trying out many jobs before settling for one is of importance since it will help you to get a better understanding about your abilities and will increase your social capital.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is much easier for people to achieve success without their family members’ help now than in the past? 80
- Do you agree or disagree? People gain more happiness from their jobs than their social life. 90
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?After high school, students should have at least one year to work or travel.It's better than attending university straight away. 73
- Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, so, while, for example, for instance, in short, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72596153846 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60225422874 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545673076923 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4251079446 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206146486099 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592185030953 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521215511681 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128874447124 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.012474320825 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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