Many people when they get money, think how to spend it or will they save the money for the future? I disagree that it’s better to spend money enjoying life like going on vacation than to save money for the future. I have two reasons which I will explore in this essay.
First of all, saving money bring more money in the future; this can help you when you become older. When you get some cash you might spend the it right now. However, if you save the money in the bank or invest in some company, later you can get more money. If you become older and you don’t have enough savings you have to work harder even if you are very old.
Thus, you cannot enjoy your senior life. Unlike when you have money, you can do what you want when you get older.
Secondly,if you have more money you can spend when you need it. Something you do not know can happen in life. For example, there may be traffic accidents or emergency needs. If you spend the money already, than there is nothing you can do after that. For instance, I will tell you about my sister’s story. My sister spent the money as soon as she received it. Hence, when my father’s birthday. She did not have the money so I lent mine.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is not better to spend the money now enjoying life because we might need the money for more important and we can use this savings when we get older.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 140, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'it'?
Suggestion: the; it
... When you get some cash you might spend the it right now. However, if you save the mon...
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Line 6, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , if
...you want when you get older. Secondly,if you have more money you can spend when ...
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Line 6, column 207, Rule ID: COMMA_THAN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'then'?
Suggestion: then
... needs. If you spend the money already, than there is nothing you can do after that....
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Line 8, column 161, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...money for more important and we can use this savings when we get older.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 17.0 52.1666666667 33% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1143.0 1977.66487455 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 266.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.2969924812 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.04836166641 2.67179642975 77% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 212.727598566 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492481203008 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 356.4 618.680645161 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9310752753 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.5 100.406767564 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7777777778 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453774678161 0.236089414692 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.175564161935 0.076458572812 230% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.160526158401 0.0737576698707 218% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.294561872683 0.150856017488 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103538405795 0.0645574589148 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.2 11.7677419355 53% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 58.1214874552 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.1575268817 51% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.07 10.9000537634 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.65 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 86.8835125448 45% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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