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Essay reference notes: This topic is refereed from another essay topic, developed by user: abdilrahman
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- TPO26-It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job. 60
- Workers would be more satisfied if they have various kinds of work to do during workday instead of doing the same job all day long. 73
- Some people take the view that older children can take care of younger children, some others may hold the view that taking care of children should be done by other adults. 70
- Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. 65
- Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 31
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 77, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'state'.
Suggestion: state
... lot of social concerns. Many customers states that most advertisements make products ...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rsonally, I agree with this statement. First and foremost, what has been put un...
^^^
Line 3, column 297, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... investors seize the capacity of having a large number of customers who will purchase their produ...
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Line 3, column 435, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...them to reach an ideal financial state. Equally important, the producers are likely to ...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...merit of effort and mind of investors. On the other hand, some people might say...
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Line 5, column 476, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...luring pictures should be considered as a ability to tightly hold their potential...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is often possible to end in collapse. In conclusion, truth-unlike portrait has...
^^^
Line 7, column 254, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to advertise'.
Suggestion: to advertise
...to make a suitable decision on choosing advertising scheme.
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, really, so, then, therefore, well, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1828.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 327.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.59021406728 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11011730239 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.654434250765 0.524837075471 125% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.9914919917 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.4782608696 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2173913043 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.91304347826 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136618063737 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0382343758983 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.080831265679 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121801727786 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.148106541479 0.0645574589148 229% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 58.1214874552 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.55 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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