With the high proliferation of the mass media, we are entering a new era of information explosion. We absorb a lot of information on hourly daily basis ranging from the political campaign to cutting-edge medical discovery. Some contend that TV and movies have a bright side on the people's behavior when it comes to teaching them good communication skill which is a crucial element in their later lives. However, from my own experience and actual observation of the life makes me believe that the TV and movies have negative repercussion on the people's morality. I will aptly substantial my views below.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that the rate of the crime is now escalating due to the violent fighting scenes and storyline of some films as well as some TV programs. In some movies, in order to, boost the audience attraction; they might add some scary element, and violent scene such as sibling may turn back to each other because of the legacy, the spouse might think of murder since he is afraid that his affairs might be found by the beloved one, and a protagonist in order to save a hostage; he might kill good-bad people with destructive weapons. All of these stories show that for the sake of one 's interest, anyone can do anything whatever the cost. These stories might mislead the youth to imitate the characters' words and behaviors because they are not mature enough and do not have enough real experience that helps them to judge what is right and what is wrong. I vividly remember an article that I read in New York Time newspaper which showed some statistics 80 % of the crime now in our hectic society because of increasing exposure people to violent movies. As you can see this piece of evidence that witnessed the negative impact of some TV program.
Another reason that deserves more word is that the morality has torn apart since the TV nowadays movies and programs shows inappropriate things and bad behaviors like sexual images and showing smoke cigarettes. When they are not protected from those scenes, they readily believe and tend to act like what television shows because they are not mature enough to see what actual reality is. These kinds of images can make them think that as something exciting and fun. This eventually leads to increasing percents of pregnant teenagers and experiencing abortion too. Also, smoking tobacco is the same thing happening these days. I will give an example from my personal experience to shed light on that subject, My son Steven when he was 15 years old; he watched movies about a group of youth who would like to forget their problems through drinking alcohol and drugs. But the question they want to get money to cover that expenses; they started to steal their parents. My son gets caught in a big crisis which was; he was not able to attend medical school because he did not Ace the exams. So, he thought the only to forgot his dilemma by drinking alcohol as he saw in the movie That taught him a bad temper. Because of his dad, we were able to save his life. From what I mentioned Some film has a detrimental effect on the people's behavior.
The last but not the least, there are so many of cable channels that lure young children and take their attention which affect indirectly on their ties with their parents. The young parents have no self-control So, they cannot decide when to stop that led them to be isolated from their families and flat response to them in a rude manner. For instance, one of my friend's son got addicted the TV programs whenever they asked him for something to do; he always behaves aggressively with them. On top of that, he wastes his time on the front of the TV without being communicating with the others that ended up with an isolated person. When he grew up, he missed their unconditional love that his parents would like to provide him, but he refused and preferred to be isolated that affects negatively on his life later.
As all things considered, even though, the TV programs have a favorable effect but the negative side is far outweighed because of it is regarded as the main reason for increasing the crimes and decline the morality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, well, as to, for instance, such as, as well as, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 30.0 11.0286738351 272% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 92.0 43.0788530466 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 93.0 52.1666666667 178% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3441.0 1977.66487455 174% => OK
No of words: 733.0 407.700716846 180% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69440654843 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.20326558436 4.48103885553 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49045315377 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 373.0 212.727598566 175% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508867667121 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 1073.7 618.680645161 174% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.1215417133 48.9658058833 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.892857143 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1785714286 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.64285714286 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 3.85842293907 415% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113788046067 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0310749176255 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0316924786208 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0741472651508 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0212333738277 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 86.8835125448 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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