Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Certainly, the media plays a critical role in people's daily lives in many of the places where they work or play. Some people think that the contents of the movies and television positively affect to young people while others do not. Both sides may have the reasons to support their own view. If I were asked to choose one, I would say that they have more positive effects on young people's life.
To begin with, when young people watch great contents on TV or movies, it can help them cultivate improtant qualities in their future lives. It requires them to be diligent, passionate, and self-disciplined. When these traits are well developed, it is likely to acheive greater success in the future. For example, when I was in high school, I always think that my life is boring to thinking that my life is just exhausting routine. Since, I have to prepare my college enterance exam, I spent 10 hours in my desk. Fortunately, I was able to overcome my monotonous life by watching movies and TV show which was motivated from IT hero, Steve Jobs. I started to learn about computer science, network, design, and coding. By doing this, I was able to let off some steam and felt happier. Finally, I got accepted in the one of the my dream school and I am continuing to study in the department of computer science. Without TV and moveis of the Steve Jobs, I still live in boring life.
In addition, when youth watch TV and movies frequently, it can contribute to building a positive attitude. It gives them a chance to improve their fashion and appearance thus be confident about themselves. High confidence tends to prevent them from feeling inferior to thinking that their life is boring routine. For instance, my brother Tom did poorly in high school. He didn't mingle well with friends and felt inferior by comparing himself to other people. However, he has changed little by little after he started TV show, which is about fashion, design and make up. He realized that he is good at fashion and tried to wear diverse clothes. Thanks to this program, he was able to communicate with friends who are intereted in fashion. Finally, he can work with great designer after he graduate high school.
In brief, I strongly believe that the advantages of TV and movies far outweigh disadvantages of those. All in all, the good media contents cannot be overestimated in pursuit of success in the youth's lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...designer after he graduate high school. In brief, I strongly believe that the ad...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, may, so, still, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in brief, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1982.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71904761905 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57171515158 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545238095238 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.8545593126 48.9658058833 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.28 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123698712927 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0346599824043 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576597904347 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0885881087507 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0991330258037 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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