Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
“Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.”
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is no doubt that teenagers nowadays spend more time watching TV than doing the outdoor activities. Skeptics claim that watching television affects negatively the youth’s behavior. However, I believe that it is a two-side impact instead of negative impact alone.
First of all, the TV channels benefit the teenagers if they are used reasonably. It is certainly the fact that the lack of information in the 21st century is unacceptable. Nowadays, toxic information could intrude every single house without a warning in advance via the advertisement, commercial letter, or just simply echoing from the street outside. To cease this wave is impossible. However, it is unfair to blame every problem on the movies and television without acknowledging its interests. For example, the world today observed a great transition in the language reallocation. The globalization had conquered almost the world and the demand of using English as a global language came afterward. As movies meets its obligation in both reflecting a global culture and creating an appropriate condition to learn English, it poses a critical question for parents to assess properly the values of this kind of entertainment. By imitating the celebrities’ accents, teenagers could easily break the shy of speaking a strange language, which is considered the hardest stage of learning foreign language. Besides, this method helps reduce the burden of tuition on parents. Hence, the benefits of television and movies should be reconsidered carefully.
On another aspect, the negative effects are a group of factors associated with practical context, not the results from the television alone. The advocates doubt about the role of parents in educating their children. According to a new research, one over four interviewed confess that they are spend more time for working than with the children. “It is the problem of financial status”, they said. People always place their blame on something else and the duty of being parents is actually a burden but they have to judge themselves before criticizing other factor such as television. Since “the world needs a hero but not all heroes wears cape”, parent have to play a crucial role in their children’s development. Besides, the rise of the internet is a significant element that distorts the youth’s moral standards. On the dark side of the internet, it is the opportunity poisoning the innocent souls by racism, terrorism, and misguided sexual orientation. For example, without parents’ control, adolescence could easily go astray into pornographic website then easily suffer the consequence of distorted sexual behavior or even worse become a pedophile. It is, not TV but the internet, should be responsible for poisoning the youth’s behavior. Since there are more dangers rising from the internet, movies and television are no longer the most toxic factor for our adolescence.
In conclusion, I believe that nowadays TV channels have more positive effects on young generation behavior than before. We have to prepare ourselves a comprehensive view on this kind of entertainment’s benefits instead of judging without any consideration.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 294, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
... four interviewed confess that they are spend more time for working than with the chi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, so, then, for example, in conclusion, kind of, no doubt, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2724.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 496.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49193548387 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15185134222 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556451612903 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 853.2 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.69349787 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.888888889 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3703703704 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 3.85842293907 441% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215866820201 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0525859484546 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532835291724 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138850037322 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0563727195175 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 149.0 86.8835125448 171% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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