Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, movies and television are essential parts of our daily life, while some people suppose that they have more negative effects than positive ones too young people. As far as I am concerned, I strongly disagree with this kind of argument. Here are some reasons could support my opinion about it.
First, I think both movies and television are playing a vital role in inspiring our young generation. From the story which showed by them, young people could again the spirit power for themselves. We can take the superhero movies as an example, from this kind of movie, we can really feel the power of our humanity. We can get the meaning of justice and leadership from Spider-Man, learn how to do better teamwork from Avengers, even understand the meaning of responsibility from the Iron Man, etc. So, I do believe these great movies could enable next generation to gain some important virtues which not only beneficial to their performance in school, like how to deal with the relationship between classmates, but also to their future career development, includes how to coopoerate with different people and how to work together as a true team. Therefore, I suppose the movie and television will enable young people to become a better person.
In addition, I think the movie and television are somehow playing as an education platform to young people, especially when they are bounded with the Internet. I have heard thousands of similar stories that kids learn some fresh knowledge from the television which really surprised their parents. For instance, I can still remember the scenery that my daughter suddenly told me how a specific bird was using mud and wood to build a nest, but, I have not taught her before, that was totally learned by herself when she was watching the documentary which made by BBC. Moreover, the parents are so busy in this bustling and hustling society that they might have not a plenty of time to company their children and teach them various knowledge. As a result, the television and movie could offer some great resources of education for young people, which could compensate part of the family teaching time that original belongs to their parents.
In conclusion, we should review the effect of movie and television seriously, think about how we can use this kind of power in a right way instead of just judge them from a negative perspective, even ignoring the influence which they have already taken for us and our next generation.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 90
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: these
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...about how we can use this kind of power in a right way instead of just judge them from a negat...
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Suggestion:
...y taken for us and our next generation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, really, so, still, therefore, while, as to, for instance, i suppose, i think, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2063.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92362768496 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59031585276 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529832935561 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.1919918418 48.9658058833 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.533333333 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9333333333 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5333333333 5.45110844103 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227694253061 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080010891389 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627271784444 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158162036981 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703080034229 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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