Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Thanks to the advance of technology our life become more complicated and it is indispensable movies and television play a pivotal role in guidance and teaching young people and it will affect young people lives in several aspects. Some people take the view that watching a movie and other entertaining program through television is wasting time. nevertheless, other people take the opposite of this view. As far as I concerned, I believe that television can contribute lots of valuable thing to society. The number of benefits over watching the movies are overwhelming. I would explore some of these benefits which are more conspicuous for me in following paragraphs.
The first significant benefits to be mentioned is that, despite the fact that nowadays people spend more time on television and movies but there is evidence showing that besides its drawbacks these activity leads children become intelligence, my personal experience is compelling example of this issue, one of my cousins at the age of nine, they are fully aware of what’s going on in the society in additional he has inordinate amount of informative information in scientific field in compression to nine years old people in the past. If I watched more informative program on television when I was a child, I would be smarter than I am.
Another interesting point which deserves some word here is that the people can access to the vast amount of variety of program through television which can be educational and also informative. The statistic shows that the children how to watch more movie are more likely to get a better grade in the school.
Admittedly, television is the favorite activity among a people, watching television helps people to wind down after hard day work and this is the effective way to get rid from daily stress, for example whenever I feel sad and I’m not satisfied from my life and also I overwhelmed with diurnal task, I sit in front of the television which helps me to regain my composure and boost my self-confidence.
Due to the aforementioned reasons I have discussed above, we obviously see both advantage and drawbacks of watching television but the benefits over watching television are greater, and I fully encourage people to watch a movie especially the documentary in their spare time.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 347, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Nevertheless
...ram through television is wasting time. nevertheless, other people take the opposite of this...
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Line 2, column 193, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this activity' or 'these activities'?
Suggestion: this activity; these activities
...ence showing that besides its drawbacks these activity leads children become intelligence, my ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, nevertheless, so, for example, i feel, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1927.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0445026178 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95022926066 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534031413613 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 143.194773143 48.9658058833 292% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 160.583333333 100.406767564 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8333333333 20.6045352989 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205967216575 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0742304400457 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0336215944723 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110329882967 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257619667465 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 11.7677419355 155% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 58.1214874552 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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