Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
In general, the behavior of a person is an integral part of one's personality; so paramount is the place of movies and televisions on the behavior of young people. With respect to this, a controversial debate has been triggered among a multitude of individuals as to whether the disadvantages of movies and television outweigh their advantages. In this case, there is a substantial number of people who are of the opinion that films and television have more negative impact on the youth. I, for one, concur with this notion. In the ensuing paragraphs, I will aptly elucidate the rationale behind my viewpoint through two outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite reason is that it increases violence among young people. It is indubitably trivial that youngsters are exposed to movies and TV. In this regard, they spend part of their free time watching TV. As a result, they are affected by the material to which they are exposed. However, some young people might not be willing to spend their time on TV. Instead, they may want to make the best out of their time by attending a sports class. To shed more light on the claim, imagine a 14-year-old boy who has watched an array of action movies. In this regard, he has learned from the behavior of different characters of the movies. Had he not been exposed to a large number of movies, he would not have shown inappropriate behavior toward people around him. As a young person might be under the impression that the hero of a movie always does good deeds, they are likely to imitate the characters' actions. By watching some improper behaviors, such as violence, they will tend to show this sort of behavior in their social interaction.
The second appealing point that provides further legitimacy to corroborate my stance on the issue is that should a young person watches movies in which the money is squandered, they will tend to consumerism. It stands to reason that the standard of living in a movie affect the way a young person think about accommodation they should possess. In this regard, sometimes movies show wealthy people that have many facilities that make life enjoyable for them, but they are not the necessities of life. As a result, young people are likely to expect to live that way. Unlike movies, people in the real world have a customary level of wealth. The more affluent the people are in movies, the more the young people become under the impression that they should live in the same way as the characters of movies. A notable example of which is the movie "luxury" in which the characters are rolling in money. By watching this type of movies, young people would like to buy many things that are futile. As a consequence, an undesired behavior spreads among young people of a society.
To recapitulate, having contemplated all the aforementioned ideas, one can reach the conclusion that the cons of movies and TV outweigh its pros. Not only does movies bring about violence but they also lead to consumerism that is an undesirable behavior. Finally, I highly recommend parents to take control of the movies that their beloved children watch, which in turn can affect their behavior.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 61, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...vior of a person is an integral part of ones personality; so paramount is the place ...
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Line 1, column 261, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ggered among a multitude of individuals as to whether the disadvantages of movies and televis...
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Line 2, column 666, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... the movies. Had he not been exposed to a large number of movies, he would not have shown inappro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, as to, in general, sort of, such as, as a result, with respect to, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2629.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 542.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85055350554 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73165994736 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457564575646 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 817.2 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7943292128 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8928571429 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3571428571 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96428571429 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18394203898 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556825622582 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454764514443 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120842930526 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571589617327 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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