Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
There is no doubt that technology in different aspects is affecting people's lives, especially the young generation. By technology progress, there is more accesibility for everyone to any data or information and even more possibility to see or here what ever people desire to or want to. I personally believe that one of the outcomes of technology which is the mass production of movies and tv series, has mostly harmfull influnces on the behavior of young people. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the followig essay.
The most significant reason coming to mind is the fact that movies do not show the reality and what have been happening to the real world. The film production companies perpose is to increase their revenue ans profit. Therefore, the only thing they care is to attract people's attention by making their proction more dramatic or action. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was 15 years old, I had seen a movie called Pride and Pregedes. That film was a love story wich cought my attention and my dream was to find someone by exact characterestics and personallity, even in my mind that guy was the most good looking man that exist and I wanted to marry a guy by the same look.
Another equally noteworthy reason to bear in mind is concerned with this fact that young people are in a critical age. They imitate most of celebrities behavior or habits. So they are very prone to build their personality based on actor or actors action's wich absolutly are not good models for them. The movies and tv are the two most accressable sources for youth. The concepts have been showed in tv are mostly movies and advertisement with not very profound people such as scientists or writers would like to participate at. So the young generation are affected by shallow celebrity wich defenetly will have nagative effects on their lives and their behaviour. For example, my nephew's recent obssesion is to laugh very loud with bother most of the people around her, and she got this from a renown acter who is acting in a famous tv sery wich got very popular lately bt tens.
To summarize, contemplating all the aformentioned remarks, we safely conclude that because movies do not exebit the reality and and the celebrities who mostly have parts in them are not good mdels for young people, their negative effects are more than their positive ones.
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- It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 70
- The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. 76
- Pterosaurs were an ancient group of winged reptiles that lived alongside the dinosaurs. Many pterosaurs were very large, some as large as a giraffe and with a wingspan of over 12 meters. Paleontologists have long wondered whether large pterosaurs were cap 85
- The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily. 63
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, therefore, as to, for example, i feel, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1996.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77511961722 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63487397019 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538277511962 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0727619635 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.888888889 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2222222222 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201438916169 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580041143162 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566026193282 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133220873094 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620648531229 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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