Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I disagree with this idea that movies and television have negative impacts than positive effects on the way young people behave. The reasons to support my viewpoint are elaborated on in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the media positively affect youngsters' perspectives toward human rights. To be more specific, there are various programs that demonstrate the right and wrong behaviors. In this regard, young people, who are not mature enough to distinguish among respectful and unfair behaviors, are able to understand to consider others rights in their decisions. On the contrary, if juveniles are not aware of such issues, their decisions or behaviors may bother others in a society. As a result, people's interactions and communications will become more respectful if people, especially young people, broaden their horizons about some moral and respectful behaviors by watching numerous programs which have been produced in TV.
Moreover, Television programs have great influence on young people's viewpoint about having a healthy life style. To put it in other words, nowadays, people have been preoccupied with a wide variety of trivial things, and they may forget to contemplate their diets and health issues. Considering the importance of exercise and nutritious meals in the humans’ health, people become aware toward having regular exercises and avoiding unhealthy foods. An example can shed some light on this issue. a few year ago, when I was a high school students my father asked me to join him to watch a TV program. This programs was about the importance and benefits of exercise in humans' health. Additionally, the speaker gave some special tips about having exercise inside home such as stretching arms and legs. After that program I was fascinated and tried to perform these activities every day in the morning. Had I not watched that TV program, I would not have started to a have regular exercise.
In conclusion, contemplating all the reasons and points, I do believe that the media have numerous positive impacts on humans' lives and behaviors. Not only do youngsters know about the right and wrong behavior when they interact with other, but also they change their perspective towards their health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1886.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26815642458 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76363582418 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575418994413 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4054437374 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.777777778 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8888888889 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223816238872 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735731944296 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110699568832 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19264330947 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1776267995 0.0645574589148 275% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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