In the past several decades, the world has gone through massive changes on both an individual and a societal level. The development of technology is at a speed that beyonde average people's imagination. It is tempting to think that with these advanced technologies, human beings today are more eaiser to maintain healthy. I, however, hold this view differently. I firmly believe that people today are actually hard to keep a healt statement.
To begin with, nowadays, people surrounded by countless advertisements which are designed to stimulate thier desire to foods, espacially, junk foods. There are plenty of faster food restaurants, that provide their costumers with junk foods containing high caleries, excessive fat and sugar, who spend a lot of money on the television advertising. These advertisements tend to show some vivd and attractive picture and video of junk foods, and combine with some claim about how health and organic their foods are. All of these set people with a biased conception that junk foods are acceptable, which may increase their faster food consum mindlessly. According to a recent study conducted by Harvard University, researchers turn out that children are more susceptible than adult toward such television advertising. They are more likely to develop some bad habits like eating faster foods frequently.
Moreover, in this high-pased society, people are so stressed out, so they are inclined to eat excessive amounts of foods. Office workers today are busy with figuring out arduous tasks, connecting with clients, and dealing with the relationship between administers and colleagues.In addition, high expectation from superiors and intensive competition among coworkers strain people's nerves. Therefore, they are urgent to relieve stress and in turn, chooses to consum more foods. My uncle Frank is a adverse example here. After a long day with work, he go back to home, set in front of TV, and never put the chips down. He gain ten kilograms after starting work for two months. This poor gay are totally out of shape and run into a subhealthy statement.
In a nutshell, it is undoubtedly that nowadays it is increasingly hard to maintain good health for the reasons discussed above.
- There is no reason to be impolite rude to another person 90
- In order to get a higher promotion and salary many people chose to improve their job performance in two ways Which one do you prefer Why To do additional work and assignments To actively participate in the group work 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends 70
- Schools have always offered students three types of after school activities But due to recent limited budgets they can only support one kind of activities Which one would you choose 1 Sports 2 Arts 3 Volunteering 76
- people who give extra money to charity or good are happier than people who spend their money on themselves 83
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 281, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...ship between administers and colleagues.In addition, high expectation from superio...
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Line 3, column 497, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...to consum more foods. My uncle Frank is a adverse example here. After a long day ...
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Line 3, column 552, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'goes'.
Suggestion: goes
...le here. After a long day with work, he go back to home, set in front of TV, and n...
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Line 3, column 622, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gains'.
Suggestion: gains
...of TV, and never put the chips down. He gain ten kilograms after starting work for t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25842696629 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84014602232 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.63202247191 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4934365409 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5263157895 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7368421053 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15789473684 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135811087249 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0361915375849 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0430857179113 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0976617694745 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508070373425 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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