People change by time and the experiences bring them wisdom. That is why most older adults are more mature and wise. I beleive younge people consider the celebrities opinions and athletes more than older people because of their wisdom and life experince, not looking for role models, and being less under peer pressure.
First, life experiences bring the resillience and maturity. Older people had more time to learn from their experiences than the younger one. Although people might have different experiences through their life, by age this probability increases. For instance, most older people underestand that people are not black and white and most are living in grey zone. They learn by time that the celebrities ideas are not necassarily correct and most of their show off are for having more fans. On the other hand, younger people have less life experiences and they easily influence by celebrities and famous people.
Also, young people look for a role model to follow and wellknown people are more attractive for them. they are wealthy and famous and they want to follow their path to become like them. However, older adult have passed this period in their life and learned that everybody and indivitual is unique and people need to know themselves more thouroughly not immitating others.
Lastly, younger people are more influenced by modes and thought. In any ideology most followers are young.In other words, in younger adults, emotional part of the brain is huge in comparison with older people. In older people their ideas have been shaped by time and the emotional part of the brain has fewer role in their decisions. However, younger usually make their decisions by their emotions. That is why they usually are more influenced by others.
In conclusion, although people have different life experience, older people are more mature and less emotional thinkers. Not only they reach to the wisdom of their age but also less likely looking for a popular role models like athletes or celebrities.
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- TPO 40 70
- TPO 43 Independent Writing TaskImagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion which of the following is the best thing to do Interrupt and correct the mistake right away Wai 66
- TPO 45 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives U 70
- Official 40 Task 1 Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon On the other hand conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would be impossible 73
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 74, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'most') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: older
...eriences bring them wisdom. That is why most older adults are more mature and wise. I bele...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 259, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'most') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: older
...is probability increases. For instance, most older people underestand that people are not ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 102, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...wn people are more attractive for them. they are wealthy and famous and they want to...
^^^^
Line 4, column 106, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...n any ideology most followers are young.In other words, in younger adults, emotion...
^^
Line 4, column 210, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...s huge in comparison with older people. In older people their ideas have been shap...
^^
Line 4, column 416, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are usually
...ons by their emotions. That is why they usually are more influenced by others. In conclusi...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, look, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1684.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08761329305 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44063514696 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456193353474 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.6213641071 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6315789474 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4210526316 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15789473684 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274500383244 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105543618461 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569967481001 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183837307379 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300269951736 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 74, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'most') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: older
...eriences bring them wisdom. That is why most older adults are more mature and wise. I bele...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 259, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'most') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: older
...is probability increases. For instance, most older people underestand that people are not ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 102, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...wn people are more attractive for them. they are wealthy and famous and they want to...
^^^^
Line 4, column 106, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...n any ideology most followers are young.In other words, in younger adults, emotion...
^^
Line 4, column 210, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...s huge in comparison with older people. In older people their ideas have been shap...
^^
Line 4, column 416, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are usually
...ons by their emotions. That is why they usually are more influenced by others. In conclusi...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, look, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1684.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08761329305 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44063514696 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456193353474 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.6213641071 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6315789474 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4210526316 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15789473684 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274500383244 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105543618461 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569967481001 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183837307379 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300269951736 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.