Society rules are arbitutary and change by time. I disagree with the statement that nowadays more rules should be obey by young adult than the past. My reasons for holding this opinion is based on my observations and studying history.
In the past, childeren did not have any opinion and they should obey the rules of their family and the society. They should respect their parents wish or even the village's needs and overrule their needs and desire. For instance, a farmer kid did not have the choice to follow their dream or disagree with their parent. Even their marriage was arranged without their opinion which showes they should follow the rules very seriously, otherwise the will be abandoned from the society and no one would help them. Nowadays people and young people have the right to disagree with their parents and follow their dream. The more prominent example I can think of is the right of woman to work and have a say which happened by time. Now we have lots of rights that we take it for granted but many sacrified their life and fighted for this rights. That is why I think young adult obey rules less than they peers did in the past.
Also, eventhough living in technology arra and change of the society changed the rules by time, the rules are more convenients and even the punishments are more humanized. In the past, if a person was caught for stealing something they might lose their hands or very gruesome punishment like torture. Nowadays the laws are more civilized and the punishment of not obeying the rules are less likely to be in the level of severity in the past. For example, in civilized society execution and torture are eliminated from their punishment option. Therefore, the young adult will encounter with less severe consequences of their actions.
In conclusion, although nowadays there are more rules because of more complexing society to follow the laws are more considerate and the consequences are more humanized. Not only young adults have more voice and right they will be more protected by the society.
- TPO 43 76
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 115, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'obeyed'?
Suggestion: obeyed
...ment that nowadays more rules should be obey by young adult than the past. My reason...
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Line 2, column 824, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ny sacrified their life and fighted for this rights. That is why I think young adult...
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Line 2, column 895, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'peer'
Suggestion: peer
...k young adult obey rules less than they peers did in the past. Also, eventhough livi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1700.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80225988701 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36839096243 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.443502824859 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2434998788 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4444444444 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38888888889 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163490144414 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661079575286 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560162860625 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113603044158 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441073182298 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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