Modern life is complicated. Although it lead us to faster pace life and much easier life, it has drawbacks. Distraction and having access to large amount of information make our life complex. We need to learn necessary skills to cope with this distraction and huge amount of information. That is why I beleive having ability to plan and organize are crucial for young people.
First, everyday we are bombard with different news and challenges in our life. This can affect our mental health and wellbeing. studies showed that bad news circle around the world much faster. Everyday we hear that something bad happened in some part of the world. this can lead to our anxiety and depression. we can lose our purpose in our life. On the other hand, different news and fashion, mode, music, and entertainment are easily accessible. Therefore, being focus on our task become much harder nowaday. By being organise and planning ahead we push ourselves to focus on our goal and not be distracted. In the long run it save us time and bring us fullfillment, accomplishment, and happiness.
Moreover, huge information and lots of option eventhough sounds good brings hesitation and indecisiveness. Between different data choosing the reliable and valid information from trusted source are very important. If we do not check the source of information we might get lost. Threfore, planning and organising ahead of time and having a checklist for every task save our precious time and help us to stay on the line. knowing about the trusted resources and being able to organize the task reduces our mistake. Also, more multitasking skills are needed nowaday as robots are able to do that and for having a future and career we need to compete with them. In this way we need to learn these skills to be able to survive and have a successful life.Therefore, catecorization and planning of data are important skills that we need to learn in our modern life.
In conclusion, technology and information age seemes to make everything fast and easy but our mind needs to learn new skills to be able to cope with this speed and spread. Not only we need to learn how to plan and set goals for ourself but also organize our tasks and be focused.
- TPO 30 Writing IndependentDo you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours 65
- TPO 45 60
- TPO44 Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are relate 60
- Official 40 Task 1 Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon On the other hand conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would be impossible 73
- TPO 48 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Because modern life is very complex it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 41, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'leads'?
Suggestion: leads
...Modern life is complicated. Although it lead us to faster pace life and much easier ...
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Line 2, column 24, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'bombarded'.
Suggestion: bombarded
...r young people. First, everyday we are bombard with different news and challenges in o...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Studies
...affect our mental health and wellbeing. studies showed that bad news circle around the ...
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Line 2, column 194, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[1]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective, and the comma is missing. Did you mean 'every day, we'?
Suggestion: Every day, we
...ws circle around the world much faster. Everyday we hear that something bad happened in som...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...bad happened in some part of the world. this can lead to our anxiety and depression....
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...can lead to our anxiety and depression. we can lose our purpose in our life. On th...
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Line 2, column 630, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'saves'?
Suggestion: saves
...d not be distracted. In the long run it save us time and bring us fullfillment, acco...
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Line 3, column 215, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...from trusted source are very important. If we do not check the source of informati...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Knowing
...s time and help us to stay on the line. knowing about the trusted resources and being a...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...e to survive and have a successful life.Therefore, catecorization and planning of data ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 13.8261648746 224% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8167539267 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74142145131 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507853403141 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.1649377221 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.6666666667 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9166666667 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.54166666667 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164611799171 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547011712238 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058234077522 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12322810256 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703434673842 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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