Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Being financially responsible adult is one of the most important lesson which children may learn from their parents. Therefore, the question whether children should learn to manage their own money at young age to become a financially responsible aduclt has long been a topic of controversy among parents and psychological circles. On the one hand there are people who adhere to the belief that children should not be involved in financial issues at young age; on the other hand, others believe that the best time to teach children how to manage their money is when they are young. As far as I am personally concerned, the latter carries futher weigth since not only are their mistakes compensatable but also do they learn to be responsible forever.
The best ways to teach children how to be financially responsible is to allow them to make mistakes. In fact, when they are young, parent can give them a samll amount of money for their dailly stuffs. For instance, they can give them money to purchase cakes, choclate or other edible stuffs. At first, they may lose their money or sometimes they may spend their money totally but finally they will lear how to manage their money for the whole week or month. Since the children are young, their mistake are also small and parents can support them. Subsequently, children won't be a financially responsibel person, unless they learn it from childhood.
Learning such important lesson from childhood, allows children to practice it through their adolescence and youth. In fact, they review how to manage their money in different situations before initiating their real life with several difficulties. In other words, learning through such long process will assist children not to forget it in the rest of their life. For instance, when I was a child, my father give me money for one month and I should manage to buy what I need for my schools, paying fares and so on. After attending to university I continued to manage what I bought and now I think I am ready to make a family since I can manage financial issues of a family. Consequently, Provided children learn to be financially responsible, they will also be in their future life.
To wrap it up, managing money from childhood provides children an opportunity to make mistakes assisting them to learn how overcome their financial issues in different situation. Moreover, such valuable lesson will help them during theri adulthood. So if I were a parent, I would teach my children how to manage their money from their childhood.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
...ay learn from their parents. Therefore, the question whether children should learn to manage their o...
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Suggestion:
... hand, others believe that the best time to teach children how to manage their mo...
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...kes compensatable but also do they learn to be responsible forever. The best w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, i think, in fact, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9023255814 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64276925083 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46976744186 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5787042658 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.947368421 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6315789474 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36842105263 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291667855268 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109745521294 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666815229111 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207220231144 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0710292536701 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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