Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, money plays a vital role in everyone's life, so without knowing how to spend it, one's life will undergo horrible conditions, such as bankruptcy. In my opinion, teaching children how to handle their budget from an early age is a necessary evil for parents to raise them as a financially responsible person. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
First of all, if kids do not understand how to manage their expenses, they will not become successful to handle their spending as an adult too. In other words, when children understand the value of money at early ages, they will learn to spend their money only on the necessary things in the future as an adult, so they will not waste it and face with bankruptcy. For example, when my brother was in elementary school, my grandmother always gave him money when he requested from her. Currently, even though he is a twenty-three-year-old adult, he still asks for money from other people because he always spends his money on the least important things, such as games, restaurants, and so on. If my grandmother had not given him money as a kid, he would be a more financially responsible adult now.
Secondly, without experiencing hard situations, such as a tight budget in childhood, children do not learn the importance of saving money for the future. Therefore, when they become adults, they cannot make the best out of the specific amount of money that they receive as an income. Consequently, they will always be low on the budget without any savings for emergency times or other situations. For instance, one of my friends who do not have a high salary has recently bought an expensive apartment. When I asked him how did he afford to buy such an apartment, he told me that he always saved fifty percent of his revenue because his parents taught him so at early ages by opening him a bank account, those days, although he was a child. As a result, if his parents did not teach him the value of saving money, he could not buy this apartment now.
In conclusion, it is a crucial fact that kids learn how to administer their budget to become financially wise adults because this way, they will distinguish important purchases from unimportant ones. Moreover, they will learn how to manage their income and save it to not become bankrupt as an adult.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2022-01-12 | ShayesteTR | 70 | view |
- TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends 70
- TPO 53 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 50
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 61
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 91, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...fe, so without knowing how to spend it, ones life will undergo horrible conditions, ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1952.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72639225182 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71817839849 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503631961259 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.7147661456 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8125 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.875 5.45110844103 218% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154500003099 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621449995029 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426580995069 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106433375841 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191573806065 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.