Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Financial issues is one of the most important headaches people have during their lives. Thus managing these issues is essential and needs certain ability to control money. While many people believe that children can have everything they want without considering financial issues, others disagree. In my view, children should learn how to manage their money and how to spend it. There are three strong reasons support this idea.
First, children will learn to distinguish between more essential needs and those necessary just for fun. Children should learn to ignore something less important to have something better. When parents give a certain amount of money to their children for expenses of a month, they will learn how to spend their money and know that there will be no more money if they spend it in wrong way. For instance, when I was twelve, I needed some materials for my art class, my father gave me money and told me this is your money and you can spend it as you like but you will not be paid more until the end of your class. So, that was the whole money I had. I decided to ignore some fantasy materials that were not essential and buy more important ones and now as an adult I know how to spend and save money well. Thus, this can be a good experience for children to manage their own money.
Second, children are taught to earn money on their own for needs. When children understand that there is fixed amount of money for them, they learn to try to earn money if they want extra. For example they can sell their handmade crafts or their painting to their parents and siblings. This will give them sense of responsibility and ability spend money carefully. When I was a kid, I always wanted to have income. So, I painted and sell them to my mother and she gave me money. That money was so important for me and I spent it precisely because I had tried for that. Therefore, this makes me responsible for what I needed.
Third, this will bring children sense of confident and independence. Psychological researches show that if children are in charge for some specific tasks, they will be more confident adults. Consequently, more successful they will be in work and life. When children are responsible to manage their own money they will learn to manage any financial issues that will be in real life. This brings ability to deal with difficulties and not to lose confident in harsh situation. Children will learn that they can overcome any difficulties by thinking and trying.
In conclusion, because of granting ability to distinguish more important needs, earn money alone and sense of confident, which are explained earlier, I think that managing their own money is necessary for children in order to be successful adult in future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... paid more until the end of your class. So, that was the whole money I had. I decided to...
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...ccessful they will be in work and life. When children are responsible to manage thei...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...hildren in order to be successful adult in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, second, so, therefore, third, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2276.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73180873181 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46422705337 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424116424116 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 693.9 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.2859605776 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.2962962963 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8148148148 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.18518518519 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236832939801 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0772011077495 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540264558323 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152009852718 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0197959876487 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.71 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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