题目原文：
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Children have an influential and tremendous impact on our lives. In fact, it is vitally important to start educating them from an early age because they are the pillars and the power of the communities who lead our nation toward progress. Moreover, they have to learn how to be a self-dependent person because this will reflects positively on their future personalities. Therefore, I believe that the young generation must have the ability to assess their money due to its benefits of both of improving the educational level and secure their future lives. In the following paragraphs, I will explain my opinion more clearly.
To begin with, education is the cornerstone of the societies, so that people must advocate their children to work for a part-time job when they are in the school in order to be able to apply for the college that will fulfill their goals since nowadays there are no free educational facilities at that stage. Indeed, the parent must have the obligation to devote more time to teach them how to manage their priorities and be a financially self-sufficient person. For example, I was from an impoverished family who was reluctant to provide me with future education. Thus, my father encouraged me to work in a library when I was fifteen years old in order to have the aptitude to keep on and never stop studying, I was a painstaking not indolent and never stubborn to take advice from my parents which they endowed me with the beneficial information that assisted me to arrange my priorities in life. In addition, I had a great lesson from them about how I used my wages. Hence, after three years of hard work, I could collect an amount of money that helped me to apply for a college and continue my dream way, after all, I was more mature than my friends who do not work and relied on their families. Consequently, parents should eagerly seek to surge their children to be manageable from an early age because this will have a great impact on their future attributes.
To sum up, children must carve out myriad information about how to be financially self-sufficient because this will have a great impact on their future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'reflect'
Suggestion: reflect
...self-dependent person because this will reflects positively on their future personalitie...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ange my priorities in life. In addition, I had a great lesson from them about how...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, after all, for example, in addition, in fact, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1779.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76943699732 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78463372188 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504021447721 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.76326051 48.9658058833 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.846153846 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6923076923 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2307692308 5.45110844103 206% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140104758396 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542116558223 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314557973384 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0929191440907 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239807625622 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.98 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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