Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to succeed, you should be more like others than be different from everyone else.
Throughout history, humans have made their all-out efforts to improve or be successful in their life. Although the meaning of success is varied from person to person, people have tried numerous ways to reach it. For some people, being wealthy is the triumph, while others believe that success means being happy in life. Whether we are in the first group or second group, the noteworthy question then is whether we should be like others or differ from people to succeed. It is my conviction that only if we are different from others will we reach the triumph. In what follows, I will shed light on my reasons for this viewpoint.
Success is the goal which few people can reach, otherwise the meaning of it will be changed. Inspirational stories of victorious persons such as Bill Gates, Steve Jobs, etc. demonstrate that they do things which are a sheer of waste of time in terms of people because successful people even researched in the field which had not existed in that era. To exemplify, because gold is the scarce metal, it is more precious than other metals such as copper or steel which are abundant, so gold has been used as decorative objects. I relate this example to real life to explain this idea. Were the average scorce of math exam X, successful student would get more than it. In other words, being triumphant needs to be unique and have distinguishing characteristics to be worth. Consequently, only a few people who achieved the valuable and unreachable goal were named as successful persons. As a result, should we imitate other people, we will be like the normal people of which victorious people are at the top.
We are not exposed to challenging and competitive fields to succeed unless we choose areas in which few people are working. Nowadays, innumerable people are living in the world, and we unintentionally or intentionally compete with them for being chosen in desire jobs, entering the ideal university, etc., so the more people are in an area or activity, the more efforts we should make to succeed. Therefore, Being like others logically aggregate the situation for success. As my personal experience, I could readily be accepted in the university in which knowing the French language was its requirement, for most people can comprehend the English language rather than speaking French. Had I tried to enter an English-based university, I would not have been accepted so easily, and I should have been better than so many people to have gotten that position. Consequently, in order to succeed, we have to be unique and have an appealing quality which people rarely have.
In conclusion, Having distinctive quality and not being like others is the best way to succeed because not only is success achievement of a particular aim which is unreachable in people’s minds, but also we face less competitive opponents. I suggest that persons who want to be at the peak of success in their careers, life, studies, etc. read the biographies of entrepreneurs to be encouraged, but it does not mean that we should behave exactly like them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 353, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... more people are in an area or activity, the more efforts we should make to succe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, so, then, therefore, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 41.0 15.1003584229 272% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2551.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 521.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89635316699 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7523818319 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491362763916 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 791.1 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9698346816 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.291666667 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7083333333 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229987251977 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0774998109074 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601822983334 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164642314094 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0133243922229 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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