In the modern world, children must educate in order to get a job and surpass others. Parents support them financially and morally to excel other people. Personally, I completely agree with the idea that parents today pay attention to their children more closely than in the past. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, parents can afford their children by many educational materials now. This is because that ordinary people’s salary is enough to provide them with things such as book, pen, computer, and others. My friend James’ own experience is compelling example of it. When he was student his parents could not meet his needs, so he stopped her school life in the tenth grade. Now, James has child named Jack, who is in fifth grade. He has enough budget to supply Jack with educational materials, so Jack can read productively without any concern. Additionally, James give additional money to his son to participate in off-school activities and improve his outlook. As a result, Jack excels his schoolmates by deep knowledge.
Secondly, the modern society is getting more and more competitive; thus, parents are more worried about their children's future and think that they are responsible for their future development. This is obvious that companies allow the best participant to get a job in application, so parents want her children to excel others and be master in their own work. This trend is widespread in my country Azerbaijan. There are few companies in Azerbaijan, so people compete with each other to get a better job. Additionally, good companies afford their workers with good salary which could change their lifestyle. As a result, parents want their children to get the best education to apply a job in my country.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that parents today take care of their children’s education more closely than they did in the past. This is because that they have enough budget to provide them with educational things. Also, today big companies want the best workers in any field, so parents educate their children to access with the good work which give them good wage
- TPO-12 - Integrated Writing Task 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- Tpo 28- integrated writing 68
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, second, secondly, so, thus, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1830.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02747252747 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70627125726 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516483516484 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5202394729 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1428571429 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306439332646 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0952978283187 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.093047853823 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214224605769 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067980871579 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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