Patience, as they popularly say is a virtue. It is critically important for both old and young individuals to instil in themselves, patience in all situations of life. I personally believe that patience is the most important value to teach a young child. I feel this way for two reasons which I will be exploring in this essay.
To begin with, many successful leaders in the world, likes Elon Musk, Bills Gates and Steve Jobs have preached about how patience has solely led them to be successful in their endeavours. So many years ago, one or two of the individuals listed above, started an adventure or project at a very young age and continued on this path till it became a successful endeavour. Some of their mates also started similar projects as they did, however, they did not have the patience it takes to be successful and gave up in the middle. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this concept. When I was at University, working in a technological-driven construction company such as ELALAN Construction company has always been my dream. As it was time for my compulsory 6-month internship, I applied for an internship in this firm and got the opportunity for an interview. The interview went successfully and I almost got the job, however, I was told to go and rest till they called me to resume my role, I was specifically asked not to call back until I am being called. After 3 days of expecting their call, I became impatient and called them for feedback on my application and consequently lost the opportunity to intern with them.
Furthermore, the root of being unsucessful or error is basically impatience. When working on a task, leading a project or coordinating an adventure, impatience spills out one's effort and makes one effort in vain. Patience, does its direct opposite and ameliorate situations. For instance, when my brother was preparing for his presentation to the chairman of the board of his company, he had very little time to present, thus became unrelaxed and was bothered about what to say. Upon seeing this, I advised him to be patient which he did, consequently, he was able to engender out his most calmest disposition and he was able to draw out what to say, how to say it and when to say it. At the end of the day, he presented well enough to the chairman of the board. Based on this experience, i strongly feel that the most important value to teach a young child is patience
Conclusively, patience is the most important virtue to teach a kid especially when they are at a young age because patience grows the mind and lead any individual to being successful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: most the calmest
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, well, as to, for instance, i feel, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2170.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72766884532 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9476584749 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.3448985893 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.210526316 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1578947368 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94736842105 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0406035673773 0.236089414692 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0130752151171 0.076458572812 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0200327361829 0.0737576698707 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0319112344087 0.150856017488 21% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0150438021852 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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