Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. Use specific reasons to support your answer.

Submitted by yjkim192 on Thu, 10/04/2018 - 03:53

Is it possible to be happy with what you have? Or will people crave for bigger or better stuff than the ones they have? If I were to answer the question I would say that it is extremely difficult for people to be satisfied with what they have.

To begin with, no matter how special a thing or a situation is people tend to get bored with it. No matter how delightful they were when they got something after time past people find something that is better or different. To illustrate this point with my own experience, when I was in middle school I always wanted a playstation3. I gathered small amount of money every day and took me about 6 month to finally be able to afford the console. When I first bought the playstation3 it was so special not because of just it's entertainment feature but also it showed my hard work to get it. However, after a couple of years past I played most of the games and I was getting bored of playing with it. Now I was finding for a Xbox. As we can see here even things that were precious becomes trivial and unsatisfying. Thus, making people look for something more or something different.

Moreover, people constantly compare with other people and if what they have or their situation is not better than others people tend to starve for more. This happens with grades, money, appearance and so on. Even if getting a 90 out of 100 is a great grade people are not satisfied with it because their friend got a 95. Even if one's salary is decent they want more if their co-worker gets more money than him or her. Then again even when people have the same amount of something they tend to envy what others have that they don't. Just like the saying goes "The grass is greener on the other side of the fence".

To sum up, people cannot constantly have the same enthusiasm they have with what they have and they cannot stop comparing with others. Because of that people will never be satisfied with what they have in hand and will always look for something better.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 397, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
... of money every day and took me about 6 month to finally be able to afford the consol...
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Line 3, column 672, Rule ID: BORED_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'bored with'?
Suggestion: bored with
...yed most of the games and I was getting bored of playing with it. Now I was finding for ...
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Line 3, column 720, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... playing with it. Now I was finding for a Xbox. As we can see here even things th...
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Line 3, column 880, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... something more or something different. Moreover, people constantly compare wit...
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Line 5, column 331, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... because their friend got a 95. Even if ones salary is decent they want more if thei...
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Line 5, column 527, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...tend to envy what others have that they dont. Just like the saying goes 'The gr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, moreover, so, then, thus, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1646.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46070460705 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33819906949 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487804878049 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.6295352479 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.45 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.4113148056 0.236089414692 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134608677105 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106352749804 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.292656395163 0.150856017488 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0688475575497 0.0645574589148 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.58 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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