Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Traveling is a vital convenience of people's life in every society. In order to soothe down and remove the tension of difficulty of life, majority of people prefer to travel. Some people believe that they gain more profit by not traveling foreign countries, whereas, others hold an opposite opinion. In my view, traveling in our own country has several advantages for two noticeable reasons.
First, traveling in people's own country improve the welfare level of their life, so it is beneficial for them than traveling other countries. If people spend their traveling money in their country, it will provide more taxes for government, which will be used for improving the people’s welfare. For example, I live in a country in which the rate of people's travel to foreign countries is not remarkable. Each year, citizens pay a considerable amount of money on their traveling in their own country, which consist of related fees for accommodation, visiting monuments, transportation, and so forth. Therefore, the available taxes for government are increased by means of inside traveling. As a result, government use citizens traveling tax for improving roads, public transportation, recovering monuments, and other useful targets. If people had not traveled in their own country, they wouldn’t gain benefit.
Second, people increase job opportunities by traveling inside their own country. In other words, by rising the number of inside traveling more services should be provided for travelers which means more chances for people to find job. For instance, long ago, in my country, statistic demonstrated a growing rate of unemployment. Surveys illustrated that traveling to other countries was one of the major factors. Consequently, government decided to provide more services, to encourage people to travel in their own country. As a result, large number of job opportunities were generated to improve servicing quality and a lot of people initiated to work in restaurants, hotels, tour guide section, and so on. Amazingly, after a couple of inside traveling the statistic represented low rate of unemployment, since several job positions was created. This experience proved me that people profit a lot by traveling in their own country.
In conclusion, though some people agree with foreign country traveling, I believe people gain a lot by traveling in their own country. Not only does quality of people's life improve, but also job opportunities increase. I think every person should pay more attention to traveling in their country, becuase its benefit returns to them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 352, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...traveling in our own country has several advantages for two noticeable reasons. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, so, therefore, whereas, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as a result, in my view, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2186.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3842364532 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99919201751 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495073891626 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 680.4 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3483912792 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3636363636 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4545454545 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.18181818182 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366083916804 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140778656583 0.076458572812 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873973821085 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268786140535 0.150856017488 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0229485415619 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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