Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in this progressive life where we live, every individual has a different way to cope with his or her problems, among which traveling sounds to be one the most conspicuous way. In this line of thought, one question that is the most prevalent among people is whether traveling inside or outside the country is beneficial for them. Personally speaking, I believe that a wider range of opportunities is provided for people if they take a trip inside their home country and they can benefit more in this regard. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are presented in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, it is no secret to anyone that traveling to the different regions of the country outweighs traveling abroad since each region in the country encompasses various culture and lifestyle. There has been a false premise (misconception) among people that the culture and the history of a country should be considered as a whole; however, one should notice that the sum is part of a whole. To put it in other words, a country is made up of different regions each with various culture, history, background and different lifestyle. To travel to each part of the country means to get familiarized with whole new sets of costumes and people. For example, Iran is known as a multi-culture country in which each city seems to be a new world with diverse assortments of culture and history. To put it into a more vivid picture, Isfahan- the central city of Iran- is called “Nesfe Jahan” which literally means half of the world. Not only the people of this region are unique but also the natural beauty of this metropolitan city is incomparable. The history of this city dates back to 2000 B.C which provide those history-hungry people a great opportunity to quench the thirst of knowing. Under such circumstance, traveling abroad is just a waste of money because people can enjoy their own country more.
Furthermore, undeniably one of the major benefits of traveling inside the country is making new friends and communicating with various people. Traveling abroad means that people should be able to understand the language specific of that region which is not an easy task for the majority of people. Although in different parts of the country a particular dialect is dominated, still people can understand each other and the process of communicating is not a big concern. A study conducted in Arizona State University revealed that most people afraid traveling abroad because they are embarrassed starting a conversation since they do not have a good command of the target language. Under such a circumstance, making friend is not an easy task and they will be high and dry with no outcome of their travel. As an illustration, my family and I went to Shiraz- a city in the western part of Iran- two years ago for summer vacation. While we were in the restaurant eating our dinner, we found out that another family who were sitting next to us has a daughter whose name was the same as my name. We started talking to each other, and the seeds of friendship were spread. This friendship was the most prominent souvenir one could take from a travel.
In conclusion, having the aforementioned reasons into account, I firmly hold the view that traveling to one’s own country is more beneficial than traveling abroad. Not only can we learn depth knowledge about our home country, but also we can communicate more easily with people with whom we share the same language.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...story of this city dates back to 2000 B.C which provide those history-hungry peop...
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Message: The adjective afraid is used with 'of': 'afraid of traveling'.
Suggestion: afraid of traveling
...te University revealed that most people afraid traveling abroad because they are embarrassed sta...
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Suggestion: travel
... prominent souvenir one could take from a travel. In conclusion, having the aforementi...
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...e with whom we share the same language.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, still, while, for example, in conclusion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2912.0 1977.66487455 147% => OK
No of words: 597.0 407.700716846 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87772194305 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94303383012 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78693344512 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469011725293 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 922.5 618.680645161 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3290315602 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.333333333 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.875 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249347490962 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0757994681024 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568084265529 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163378368442 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0140346517588 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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