These days, most people including children and adults exercise. Exercise is one of the ways to improve our body strongly and healthily. However, people are arguing about if it is more important for old people than young people. I disagree with this. I have two reasons regarding my opinion.
First of all, young people get much stress from their school or working place. Students study all day while they are sitting on a chair. Workers have the same case with students. They also sit in their chairs and work the whole day long. Hence, their immune system is getting lower. To make a sturdy body, they have to exercise regularly. I have a compelling example of this. I used to take a swimming class every weekend before. I could repudiate my mental stress and my body fatigue while I’m swimming and talking with other people. As a result, I felt that exercising is to get rid of our stress.
Secondly, old people’s bodies are not as strong as young people. Their bodies are old and already weak. It is unfit for a frail body to exercise regularly. It can account for serious physical suffering conversely. For instance, let’s assume that my grandmother and grandfather exercise. Unfortunately, their bodies are not athletes to exercise. Typically, not only my grandparents but also every old person's bodies are not in trim to train physically. Therefore, instead of getting healthy, this exercise can lead them to having sick bodies.
Consequently, I disagree with this statement. Because young people ought to exercise to keep their body vigorous. Plus, old people’s bodies are not as strong as young people's. Hence, it can create other significant problems.
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...ercising is to get rid of our stress. Secondly, old people’s bodies are not as...
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...e can lead them to having sick bodies. Consequently, I disagree with this state...
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...uently, I disagree with this statement. Because young people ought to exercise to keep ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, conversely, first, hence, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1400.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 280.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61813728768 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564285714286 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 10.0 20.1344086022 50% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.1233507533 48.9658058833 41% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 51.8518518519 100.406767564 52% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 10.3703703704 20.6045352989 50% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 5.7037037037 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198493243108 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561384293373 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706955013024 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154261133076 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0914868113235 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 11.7677419355 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.79 58.1214874552 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.24 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.0 10.002688172 40% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.0 10.0537634409 60% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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