Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Physical exercise is more important to older people than to young people

Health has long been one of the hotly debated topics on societal issues. There are multiple approaches to keep ourselves in good nick. It is controversial that either young people or old people are more proper to do physical exercise. In my view, physical exercise is of equal importance not only for the elderly but also for the younger people, especially those white-collar workers, being exposed to prolonged sedentary behavior.
First of all, compared with the aged people, younger people like desk-bound laborers lack time to take physical exercise. The aged people who are already enjoying their retirement life are more likely to have a chance to stretch their bodies at a park downstairs. However, the time these workers spend on exercise is limited since they have to work during the day. In China, for instance, some workplaces adopt a“996” schedule, meaning that a workday begins at 9 in the morning and ends at 9 in the evening, and constantly work for six days a week. Six days are workdays in a given week. Under such a burdensome schedule, needless to say, workers are already physically and mentally exhausted. But their need for exercising is still there, which is even more pronounced amongst young people. It is extremely hard for them, who are already exhausted by their intense workload, to squeeze exercise into their tight schedule. Therefore, physical exercise is more urgent for this group of people.
Besides, young people, being constantly in a poor state of intense competition and pressure, are more likely to suffer from physical and mental diseases. The study, conducted by World Health Organization (WHO), revealed that the age at which cancer is diagnosed is getting younger, meaning that cancer in young adults is rising. And further investigations state that the number of lung cancers amongst people under 45 increased significantly over two decades. The most contributing factor to this is smoking, which is highly related to anxiety and other negative moods. And doing exercise has been proven as an effective method against depression and mental diseases. Thus, the young generation really needs to take physical exercise regularly.
Finally, the younger generation that lacks exercise awareness needs more exercise. Older adults with certain medical conditions at a young age learn the importance of staying healthy, so they stick to exercise as part of their daily routine. However, young people may underestimate the value of physical exercise. This is mainly because they may think they are still young and do not need to pay attention to their health. However, it is too late to become aware of the disease.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, however, if, may, really, so, still, therefore, thus, for instance, first of all, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2227.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15509259259 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65140691585 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539351851852 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 703.8 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3228943471 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7916666667 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277406791751 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794841375128 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0808475538754 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185317745089 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345271049917 0.0645574589148 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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