Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that young people should overcome a lot of problems caused by unfair rules that societies force them. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that all of these rules were created to care citizens in society and they are almost necessary and useful. However, I to a great extent, agree with this idea that the rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
First and foremost, today families eliminate young people from freedom to make a decision for their own lives. The mutual concern of most people between the age of 20 to 30 is that their parents dictate their own obey and decisions to them. For example, most parents do not allow their children for marriage before graduation from university. Last year my friend and her fiance, break up because their parents did not agree with their wedding before finishing their study at university.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that the high tax limited young people from starting a business. For instance, last year my brother and some of his friends were going to establish a chemical laboratory. Nonetheless, their plan was not successful, because they should pay huge tax which could not be covered with their income. However, we need some laws that can provide a smoother business condition for beginner young people.
Finally, yet importantly, students after graduation from national universities should work in the company that was determined by the government. I believe that this rule is not fair. First, national universities are the best academic centers in our country, and the most talented students interested to study there. However, this rule has been led to some of them became unwilling to study in these universities. Second, some of these companies are not fit for these gifted people and it leads to fading their intelligence.
On the basis of reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that the rules that societies today expect young people to follow are too strict. Because today parents controlled all aspects of children's life and high tax confined young people to start their own business, and because of some government's rules are not fair.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 78
- Tpo 49 73
- In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. 76
- TPO 42 60
- Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well. 65
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 258, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he best academic centers in our country, and the most talented students intereste...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, nonetheless, second, so, still, for example, for instance, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0614973262 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53154905124 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526737967914 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.9208467774 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.166666667 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7777777778 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229436586036 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830245803411 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123011928324 0.0737576698707 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148903919747 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119177012376 0.0645574589148 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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