I think the rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey is too strict and limit young people's possibilities. A rule is a kind of experience and expectation, which is passed on through generation to a younger generation. There is no denying that obeying rules can help young people to stay away from troubles. But social status has changed over time, some rules are no longer suitable for today's young people, which may become a huge burden on their way to find their own means.
Firstly, some rules are just the transformations of the dark side in culture. For example, a hot topic on the Chinese web is that women are not allowed to have meals around the table at new year's evening in some areas of northern China. Those who agree with this rule say that women are busy preparing the meal and they can't fit well into men's topic. However, this rule only conveys discrimination towards all women. To make things worst, some elder people in these areas even take it for granted that female are ferior to male in some situation. There is no doubt that this kind of social rule should be abandoned and young people should not be influenced by the dark side of culture.
Another point is that some rules are just unrealistic expectations for young people. In China, most parents don't expect their children to fall in love during high schools. High school students have reached the age of eighteenth, forbidding them from talking about love in teenage years is not realistic. As long as parents discover some traces of teenage love, they will impose great pressure on students, which may lead to unrecoverable hurt inside a teenager's heart. What's worse, they even expect their children to get married shortly after they graduated from college. This kind of rule is just the elder's control over the younger generation. They may expect a good result but it is not realistic. Young people deserve the freedom to make their own choices.
In a nutshell, some rules that societies today expect young people to follow is too strict. Young people should receive guidance and suggestion from the elder generation, but it is unfair to force young people to accept all of them. Young people have their own thoughts and feelings. Even if they fall into some kind of troubles, they can draw lessons and grow quickly.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 321, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...en are busy preparing the meal and they cant fit well into mens topic. However, this...
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Line 5, column 109, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...or young people. In China, most parents dont expect their children to fall in love d...
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Line 5, column 453, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teenagers'' or 'teenager's'?
Suggestion: teenagers'; teenager's
...may lead to unrecoverable hurt inside a teenagers heart. Whats worse, they even expect th...
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Line 5, column 470, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...overable hurt inside a teenagers heart. Whats worse, they even expect their children ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, well, for example, i think, kind of, no doubt, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1926.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77915632754 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39192569871 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518610421836 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2747480677 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5454545455 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3181818182 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68181818182 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232239057503 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0839545527481 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119217704116 0.0737576698707 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16908251101 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0912182411255 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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