There are differing opinions whether the standards that societies nowadays demand on youngsters to strictly follow are harsh. Some people believe that the rules settled out for young people are too strict. Nevertheless, other people argue that these stringent rules are crucial for these young generations. Personally, I agree with the latter.
To begin with, tightly obedience to strict rules teaches youngsters the quality of disciplines. Discipline are one of the most important qualities of a well-rounded men. Strict rules are often accompanied with disciplinary punishments. Thus, if one crosses over a prohibited line, s/he will be prone to very hard penalty. So as one tries to avoid such harsh situations, s/he will set a mindset of being disciplined. And eventually, this mindset will become his/her natural instinct, he/she will be more likely be a better, a more mature person, since the roads of every successful persons always contain good characteristics, such as discipline.
Secondly, I strongly agree with the statement that these stringent rules are crucial because these rules will teach young people how to take responsibility. As the world becomes more and more technologically advanced, teenagers are more susceptible to addictive factors such as Internet, tablets, cellphones. Those addictions make them reluctant to do their housework and homework, which are their responsibilities. As forceful criteria are strictly applied, teenagers will have to take into account serious action such as doing housework carefully, or doing homework voluntarily. Eventually, they will learn to be more responsible to people around them and especially for themselves. For example, when I was young, I was really addicted to video games; at any time that I got free times, I always spent on playing games. All the duties that I had dodged, my mother always had to do it for me. But when I got older, realized that my mom had always been busy with many complex struggles that life brought to her, that’s when I knew that had to step up and take responsibilities.
In conclusion, I agree that following and obeying to strict rules that societies apply to young people is necessary. This is because not only these rules will teach them to be disciplined, but they also educate them to become a person with responsibility.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... the quality of disciplines. Discipline are one of the most important qualities of ...
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Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'man'?
Suggestion: man
...t important qualities of a well-rounded men. Strict rules are often accompanied wit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, nevertheless, really, second, secondly, so, thus, well, as for, for example, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1971.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27005347594 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03177548896 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561497326203 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1336626034 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.55 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216105850928 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787002433304 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0922369764518 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166519284898 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0876186664837 0.0645574589148 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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