It is generally believed that friends are more influential in students life when compared to educators. However,in my opinion, I agree that teachers play a major role in influencing students. I feel this way for one main reason, which I explore in the following essay.
To begin with, teachers are the foundation of young people’s behavior. So, they strive hard to role-model what an appropriate behaviour would look like. For instance, if a teacher models how to help someone in need in the class, the student imitates and helps others in the society. For instance, when I was in a senior secondary, we had a student that was differently abled because of cerebral palsy and moves around the classroom using a wheel- chair. Every day, our teacher helped that student to be included in the classroom by making changes in the seating plan, delivers differentiated lesson and assisted with motor skills. By watching the teacher performing many tasks for that student, most of the students in the classroom also started to help that student as well. Since, the teacher is the centre of attention in the classroom setting the student that watches her behaviour , learnt to imitate that behaviour even outside of the classroom .As a result, our classroom won a good Samaritan award that was awarded to a classroom that adapts helping behaviour.
On the other hand, if a student is influenced by their peers, they end up in unacceptable behaviours in many ways. For instance, high school students nowadays have lots of peer pressure to show off in the classroom. So, they perform various activities to impress others. For instance, recently there has been a rise in the use of vape (an harmful drug) among high school student in our community school. As a result, the school lost a student. After school administration got into causes of this issue, they found out, this started as a game among friends in order to challenge who can smoke more vape in a day. This affected student’s brain because of lack of oxygen and lost his life in the battle. In this scenario, friends that influenced negatively caused a student’s life. This detrimental situation clearly shows how friends influence negatively. So, it is more advisable not to depend on friends as they are not matured enough to differentiate between good and bad habits and they don’t take things seriously.
In conclusion, it is more agreeable that teachers influence students positively in the classroom in order to produce a better citizen for the society, rather than friends that influence negatively.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, second, so, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2161.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04906542056 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82677453229 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544392523364 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3324632112 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.904761905 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.380952381 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210268476783 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662283434789 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502768277027 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143581235635 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318969922507 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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