Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Success is defined by the amount of money someone earns.
People disagree on the definition of real success. Some people believe that success could be defined by how much money a person makes. However, I think level of success is not determined by one's income. I feel this way for many reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First, one could be successful in many different ways. Some people are very successful because they started a company from the ground up and now they are making huge amounts of money. Other people are successful because they completed a highly respected academic degree. Although scientists do not make as much money as a businessman who established a financial empire, both are considered successful. One example from real life is my friend and me. I chose to go to school and I got a Pharm.D in pharmaceutical sciences. On the other hand, he dropped out of college to establish his own business. He managed to make a fortune even before I was able to graduate. After graduation, I started to work as a pharmacist as I wished and he continued overseeing his company. We were both seen as successful by our friends even though it was two different types of success. In my case it was academic, and in his it was financial.
Second, success is subjective overall, which means it's only the individual himself who could decide if he or she is successful or not. It's more about inner satisfactions with one's accomplishments. People may consider someone ahead of the game, but they do not have that feeling themselves. For example, when I graduated from pharmacy school, a lot of my friends assumed that I would be very delighted because they thought this was a tremendous achievement. On the contrary, I did not see getting this degree as a massive step forward because I was more ambitious to do other things.
In conclusion, money is not the most accurate measure for success. This is because there are other kinds of success where people do not earn a lot of money, but still contribute significant value to the world. On top of that, being successful is not an objective characteristic as it sometimes wholly depends on the person's perception of their own deeds.
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Suggestion: one's
...Its more about inner satisfactions with ones accomplishments. People may consider so...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...c as it sometimes wholly depends on the persons perception of their own deeds.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, on the contrary, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1790.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79892761394 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84133234673 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55764075067 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.3185896485 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.8260869565 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2173913043 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26086956522 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2002950475 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552867278884 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046908563958 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131170546109 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334184208481 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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