When it comes to the issue that, the ability to make relationships with people are more important than studying hard and get high grades in schools for your success in your future job, some people may agree with this opinion and give us sound reasons for their beliefs. On other hand, some other people might disagree and have different many opinions. Also, those opponents may have the right to believe in that. I believe that the ability to make a lot of beneficial relationships with population is much important than just graduating from school with high grades because of many reasons. This short essay will demonstrate some points regarding my point of view in the following paragraph:
First of all, in my opinion, it is widely understood that our life completely based on the relationships between the people, we can’t do everything without help from other individuals. So, for success in our career we should try to communicate very well with people around us and make good relationships with them. However, high scores in school do not give us a guarantee for success despite its importance.
Another point why I advocate that building many connections with other people in our field, this allows us to progress easily in our career and offer higher positions in the future. Consequently, this can help us to be more adherent to our jobs places and make us economically comfortable. On other hand, being a nerd in school alone does not provide a good salary job.
Finally, it is well established fact that, more connections equal more respect gaining from society, people usually respect the one who have many relationships and helping others. For instance, my father has a lot of friends and relationships with others, he gradually became the CEO of his company in short period of time with respect by employees there.
From what has been discussed above, we can draw a conclusion which says that to be successful person in your job and life, you have to be a good communicator and build many good relationships with people around you.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, however, if, may, regarding, so, well, for instance, in short, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9367816092 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72567733797 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540229885057 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.6215851141 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.153846154 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7692307692 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.69230769231 5.45110844103 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327567237278 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109556114617 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0939104996319 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163748671848 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0852792855965 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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